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The first comma should really be after 'or' and you need a comma after 'accurately' I believe those are called appositives.Daina had been sleeping, or more accurately trying too.
another appositive.She slipped on a pair of slippers, grabbed her cell phone [no comma] and [comma] on a whim[comma] her father's pocket knife and crept to the bottom of the stairs.
Outside, a cool breeze entered her window and she tried to settle into a state of drowsiness but her mind resisted, a lifetime of thoughts forcing themselves upon her—as if some subconscious level of her understood some element of consequence that her conscious self could not yet discern.
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