Hey there Taylor!
Thanks for the request, sorry it took so long to fulfill
I see that you already come awesome reviews, and I'm not really sure what I can add to that.
Well, your writing was flawless, I loved your descriptions and your MC's voice. What I would have liked is more 'conversation' at the end. The dialogue felt...flat. I wanted more out of Erik. I wanted guilt in his eyes, or choking up when he's trying to talk. I understand that he'd be dazed and confused, but he asked for her and sits there looking dumb? Doesn't react to her presence?
That was pretty much all I had to say. Sorry if I couldn't add more, but you're a very talented writer, and the best reviews are already done. Feel free to request another review from me: it would be a real pleasure to read more of your work.
Tanya
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