Alright, so, your style of writing is sort of confusing. The way you write in first person, yet have other peoples thoughts. Thank you for explaining that. Now onto your MC. i'll admit it. I haven't read the other parts, but I will. Just from this, part though, your MC seems like a Mary-Sue. Just because of her powers thing. Please, take the test. It's really helpful (http://www.ponylandpress.com/ms-test.html)
keep writing ~WickedWonder
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The most important thing is to preserve the world we live in. Unless people understand and learn about our world, habitats, and animals, they won't understand that if we don't protect those habitats, we'll eventually destroy ourselves. — Jack Hanna
