Oh my. I kinda guessed that it wasn't his baby but I never thought that this would happen....
I couldn't find any mistakes...YAY...so more comments rather than crit.
I really love Ice Cubes and your actual writing has improved. I just hope that the story all ties together and winds up well. (Not necessarily happy, just good writing...)
A person is a fool to become a writer. His only compensation is absolute freedom. He has no master except his own soul, and that, I am sure, is why he does it. — Roald Dahl