Young Writers Society

Dude! I just stumbled on this (yes, I am a horrible stalker and all) and I just wanted to tell you how much I loved it! The ideas... the zombie virus being accessible to blood and air, that was just so cool because it's so realistic (as far as viruses go). I am a little confused... blood and semen usually seem to be related with one another, as far as carrying viruses go, but in this case a hooker succumbed to the blood type and not the sex type... apparently? Whatever. Maybe it's kind of like Hepatitis C or something, where it is transferred by blood rather then sexual intercourse. And yes, I thinking about this way too much. But it's still interesting!


Also, I have to wonder... her brother! I wonder how he died. Was it because he was turning into a zombie or because someone they knew was a zombie or maybe he just couldn't take anymore? This is an awful thing to have to carry, so I think it should be answered in fuller depth IN SUBSEQUENT CHAPTERS THAT YOU WILL WRITE, OR ELSE.

One thing that I found kind of disappointing... it ends too quickly and there's only one chapter...this one! I think this is the most problematic thing, lol, because this idea has been done so well and you ended it too quickly. I think if you ended it here:

He glanced back at Avi once more, before letting his eyes drop closed.

...then it would be a lot better. Then you could talk about the journey in the next chapter since there WILL be a next chapter, YOU HEAR ME?

YOU NEED TO CONTINUE THIS, OR ELSE.

Not that that's a threat or anything... mwhahahaha.

Look forward to see MORE of this!

AW! Thanks Snoink! I was actually thinking about writing more of this. I have three more chapters written already but never bothered putting them up, since I knew that I would never continue with the story. And yeah, xD, it was originally ended where you said it should be ended but I entered it in a contest (Won second place!) and it needed to end somehow.

YOU HAD THREE MORE CHAPTERS AND YOU DIDN'T POST THEM?

*shuns*

You totally have enough points to post them. DO IT.