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Hi guys, i'm starting a novel and this is just a very short prologue.

Prologue:

Once, I daydreamed like many other girls that I would find Mr Right.
But I was wrong, I had found Mr Perfect.
The only problem was, he didn’t like me.
In fact, he hated me.
You might want to ask who this person is.
Then listen to me. Please do.
This is my story,my life…my cup of green tea latte.

Awhh, I love this, because the first line is so right. I really want to hear more Write...........

Yours,

Hi there!

This is a great beginning. I like how you wrote this more of like a poem than a story. It's different. Most prolouges are in story form and give a short background, but yours is perfect (in my opinion). It's great how you don't really go into much detail, leaving us guessing and wanting to read more. This is also short, sweet and to the point. The title also stuck out to me. It's very original and I love it!

PM me when you have the first chapter up. I can't wait to read more! Keep writing!

One of the shortest prologues I have ever read, but I think probably my favourite. To me, it was almost like a really short poem. I loved the first two lines:

sweethearts wrote:Once, I daydreamed like many other girls that I would find Mr Right.
But I was wrong, I had found Mr Perfect.

Really beautiful.

Also what is a green tea latte? I only read this prologue because I was curious what it meant. But now I also want to know what happens in the story. Eager to know!

Well, I read the wall post and decided I'd check this out =)

I thought this was really cute and a great way to start something off. To me, the amount you've written is completely insignificant. It has what I think makes a superb prologue. It doesn't reveal so much information to make me think that the plot is either overly-complex or extremely predictable, but reveals enough to make me intrigued by it and to not make it seem like a pointless collection of words =)

sweethearts wrote:Once, I daydreamed like many other girls that I would find Mr Right.
But I was wrong, I had found Mr Perfect.

I loved these opening lines and that little twist that followed them =)

The only problem I had was in those two opening lines, however. It's basically I don't think the had should be used there (see above), but what do I know? =P

Anyway, I'd like to keep reading this =)

Hi there! I'm here
I agree with all the comments above. Who said that prologues have to be long? This short one definitely makes me want to read more, and that's what a prologue should do. Sounds like a sweet novel! I'll read the first chapter next
(Although right now I'm waiting for my dad to come to take me to granny's, where there is no -gasp- internet, so maybe you'll get the comment next week. Sorry!)
DDD
Cheers,
Alpha

Hey there! I saw this was also by you and decided to chack it out. Once again, it's short simple, but I believe that's all that's required here. It says what you want it to say, and yet it intrigues the reader at the same time. I have to say, I'm already looking forward to reading the first chapter. Good job, keep writing.

Sweethearts, I have to say, I was not hooked. There was nothing significantly interesting about it. It seemed a little "neutral". I didn't get a passion, angry, sad, or really anything vibe. The sentences were okay, but nothing stood out. Give it a little "color" or something. Give the sentences some flow and depth. It's a prologue, so iti's oka to give a little nartative about the story. Keep on writing though!
Dragon Rider

nice prologue. thought i'll come around and show my support ;D