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Get over it my friend ch 1



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Mon May 05, 2008 11:35 pm
myfreindsavamp says...



She was shaken away the next morning by one of her [s]good[/s] friends, Jess.

*fixed*

I wouldn't say that Jess is a good freind....
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:18 am
Maki-Chan says...



I liked this ^_^ If you just correct what TN pointed out. Also just do spell check.


Nice job Amber ^_^





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Tue May 06, 2008 1:20 am
myfreindsavamp says...



Ya I'm pretty sure I've put this thing through the spell check 50 times.
^-^Thank you ch 2 will be coming onto the site tonight if I canget enuff points. That's doubt ful though.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Tue May 06, 2008 1:56 am
LunaBuna43 says...



Yay! Awesome Amber-chan! Can't wait for chapter two!
*Does a dance*
Awesome Amber-chan!

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:58 am
myfreindsavamp says...



Thank you.Thank you. *bows*^-^
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Tue May 06, 2008 10:52 am
spaced_out says...



it was interesting.

The plot was good, but have more romance.

the grammar was, good.

you just need a little more romance.
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Tue May 06, 2008 11:17 am
myfreindsavamp says...



The romance will come trust me.
We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet
  





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Sun May 11, 2008 3:04 am
C.J. Mustang says...



I'm sorry, but I also have to mention the spelling errors. You should really fix those. That's about all I found. :wink: other than that, it was awesome!
  








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