I really liked that story. It has some things that I can relate to and some I can't at all. I think it would be fine just by itself or with another couple of chapters. Keep writing!
Just to let everyone know, the next two chapters are in "Other Fiction" I don't plan on posting any more of this draft, but I would very much like some opinions. This week I was thinking about it and decided that I need to completely restructure the way the story is working.
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark"
You know that place between sleep and awake, that place where you still remember dreaming? That’s where I’ll always love you. That’s where I’ll be waiting. — J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan
