I don't think it was confusing; I got it. Tangles, tangles.... Brad and Kiera, Cat and the abducted Annie.
I saw only this:
sokool wrote:His excellent vision enabled him to see every detail clearly, and he smiled as he saw King Raztik, talking to a guard on the front steps of his castle, a boyish grin lighting his face.
Nix the comma.
"TV makes sense. It has logic, structure, rules, and likeable leading men. In life, we have this. We have you." -Abed Nadir
YYYYEEEEEESSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!! Perfect. Okay, first of all, I think you kinda slipped magic in there rather nicely. It wasn't too abrubt. I think I liked the thing about the price... Uh, in the begining I don't like how you had Marimamne say, "Cross my heart hope to die." That seems extremely childish and kind of unnessasarry.
I like the thing with the soilders and whatnot. Uh, poor Annie Witcher Bubber... Anyway, at least they got Cat. He he... Okay, thats just about it.
~Pol~
I used to rule the world, see it rise when I gave the word, now in the morning I sleep alone, sweep the streets I used to own
The day, which was one of the first of spring, cheered even me by the loveliness of its sunshine and the balminess of the air. I felt emotions of gentleness and pleasure, that had long appeared dead, revive within me. Half surprised by the novelty of these sensations, I allowed myself to be borne away by them, and forgetting my solitude and deformity, dared to be happy. — Mary Shelley, Frankenstein
