Young Writers Society

Hahaha I loved that!

I loved the Charlie part and Edward's reason for saving Bella, it was soo funny! Great job!

lol hahaha poor Edward nice job tho I enjoyed it

Note: Until further notice, this is it.

I guess everyone's just going to have to burrow back into the books (why not? Maybe it'll annoy me enough to start another script!).

Have a great one.

Ok no offence, but IM offended. tht kinda screws everything. i am a HUGE fan of twilight and that kinda made my feelings hurt. i think that the movie is going to suck out loud, but that doesnt change anything. the way you wrote it was confuseing.

haha this was really funny! I laughed a lot! Personally I'm not a big fan of Twilight *checks outside to see if an angry mob of teenage girls are standing outside with pitchforks* I dislike Bella..

I AM OUT FOR YOU Kelsey Logan you make me sad. and if you want, i can pull together all of my freinds and form up a mob outside ur house if you want

This was hilarious. Charlie is too funny, but Edward is just so different...and so care-free...I mean how is Bella going to fall in love with this Edward especially when he is trigger-happy? But I like seeing Edward this way...he kissed his keys? The way you twisted everything was crazily clever...I loved this soo much. I'll be waiting for the next edition. Bravo.

It was okay. But... I really can't picture Edward squealing. It takes away from his elegance...

Again, I'm pretty much speechless. I think my eyes are bleeding. Just kidding. Anyways, maybe I'm biased because I love Twilight, but besides the fact that it didn't use the characters' personalities at all, none of the parts made much sense. It's too fake and pointless to be funny, in my opinion. I'm not happy about this at all.

That is great! I love the books, but that is so funny!

i couldnt stop freakin laughing! it was so hillarious!! great job, keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Man the part with charlie and edward was too funny!

*Shakes her head, jealous* "She's STILL geting reviews..."

The other day I saw some people roleplaying Twilight...well kind of like a story board and it was really funny. I immediately thought of you...

You said that I may be the better writer, I just think I have better ideas. You have the humor and the talent. I mean seriously look at you Jack. , you son of a gun your wonderful.

well that is better if is one big joke.

i would totally make a joke out it as well. Any way more hilarious than the first one.

Creative...yeah, but in my opinion you kind twisted the characters in a way that they just shouldn't be twisted. I am a fan of the Twilight series but this just isn't right. Edward is serious most of the time and they are all very serious when it comes to Bella, and Charlie really cares a lot about Bella. I don't know, in my opinion it is just too far fetched and fake.

Nice writing, but could have been better.


-Jess

Incredibly amazing, again! I loved this more than the first one. Charlie's lines are just perfect!

Gold star!

[note: I'm a twilight fan]

That was v.v funny, and just as good as your last peice.
I loved the way he tried to use Bella as a shield. That made me laugh out loud. You are really, really good at this.
I like it when Emmett says "come on, you want to suck her blood and her -"
That was funny
I like the way he kisses her keys as well.
I really can't find anything wrong with it, so I'm going to shut up now.
I want more!

I loved that so much. You are really, really good at this.

I love the way Edward accidently saves Bella and tries to use her as a shield...

hahaha, I was laughing so much at that.

Oh, and Charlie was great.

I think it would make life easier for us if you just put their names instead of letters, if you're doing it on word, you can just use the "replace word" tool.
Oh and I like it when Emmett goes "come on, you like to suck her blood and her-"
hehehe.
that was so good.
I want more!
Oh and i perferred it to part 1.