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dianis97 wrote:
Chapter 3

All of the guests were transported to the reception Alice had organized. We hadn’t arrived yet because Alice thought we should enter a few minutes after everyone had arrived so we could do our first entrance as Mr. and Mrs. Cullen.

Wow, it sounded so weird when I thought about it, it was just so unreal that I was now Isabella Cullen

“What’s wrong love?” asked Edward looking at my expression instead of the highway
It should be "What's wrong, Love?"

“nothing, it’s just..it just feels so unreal actually being married to you, I mean, I’m not Isabella Swan [b]Capital: Nothing unreal. Actually being married to you
anymore, I’m Isabella Cullen” I said

“I know, I can’t believe you are Isabella Cullen either”
Isabella Cullen either."

He looked straight into my eyes with his beautiful golden eyes that were full of happiness and enthusiasm, I couldn’t help to smile
, and I couldn't help to smile.

“I love you” he whispered after a short comforting silence
"I love you," he whispered after a short comforting silence.

“I love you too” I smiled
"I love you, too." I smiled.

“So, are you ready for your wedding party?” he asked with a smile on his face
with a smile on his face.

“actually, I am, I guess if I want to be a real Cullen I have to be a big party fan, right?” I teased
"Actually, I am, I teased.

“No, I love you the way you are, you don’t have to change anything to be a Cullen” he responded
to be a Cullen," he responded.

“Well, just one thing”
"Well, just one thing."

His expression changed, he knew what I was talking about. I didn’t have to change anything to be a Cullen, just one thing, my human status. In a few days time I would become one of them, strong, beautiful and immortal, I would become a vampire, a real Cullen
a real Cullen.

“Let’s talk about that later” he said, I know he doesn’t like the idea of me becoming a vampire, but he had to accept that if he wanted to expend the rest of eternity with me, which was what he wanted “so,
"So,
we are here, are you ready?” he asked

I simply nodded, and took a deep breath
I simply nodded, taking a deep breath.

“let’s go” he whispered and then, in less than a second he opened my door and took me, gently, out
"Let's go," he whispered. Then, in less than a second

of the car.

He held my had strongly, but gentle, without hurting me, as we entered the reception Alice made.
The place was beautiful, it was big and all made in white marble, the lights were really shining and in the entrance there were a few red roses petals on the floor. It was incredibly gorgeous.

“wow” I gasped
"Wow," I gasped. (italicize it if you want...)

“Do you like it?” I heard Alice’s voice behind me
voice behind me.

“It’s amazing Alice, I love it” I smiled
"It's amazing Alice, I love it!" I smiled.

“Thanks, I knew you would, wait until you see the rest”
until you see the rest."

“Bella!” yelled Emmet entering the room, he was with the rest of the Cullen family
of the Cullen family.

“Emmet!” I yelled as well
I yelled as well.

“congratulations sister, you look beautiful” he said giving me one of his bear hugs
"Congratulations sister, you look beautiful," he said, giving me on of his bear hugs.

“Thanks”
"Thanks!"

“Bro, congrats!” he hugged Edward
He hugged Edward.

“Congratulations Bella” said Jasper whom was standing behind Emmet
"Congratulations, Bella," said Jasper, whom was standing behind Emmet.

“Thanks Jasper” I said smiling
"Thanks Jasper," I said, smiling.

And then, he came closer and gave me a hug, it was kind of awkward, I could tell he was feeling a little uncomfortable. I was shocked, it was the first time he had ever touched me.

“Bella!” said Rosalie’s voice behind me
"Bella!" Roaslie's voice came from behind me.

I pulled away from Jasper and turned around to see Rosalie
around to see Roaslie.

“You look beautiful, I’m really happy for you, you really deserve this” she said
"You look beautiful. I'm really happy for you, you really deserve this," she said.

“Thank you Rosalie, you look beautiful too”
beautiful, too."

Then, Carslile and Esme came a gave me a hug, they both congratulate me, like the rest of the Cullen
came and gave me a hug, they both congratulated me, like the
family.

After that, Edward came to hold my hand, followed by Alice, who was incredibly enthusiastic by the fact I was about to see what she had done with the main salon.

As the door opened, I saw everyone sitting down on their chairs. The whole room was, as well as the
main entrance, white marble. In the middle of the room was a huge wedding cake, with some pink and red roses petals on it, next to it was a microphone and a little table with two glasses of champagne for me and Edward, the lights were really shinny, on the right side of the room was a pile of presents
Edward and I, the lights were really bright. On the right side of the room was a pile of presents.
organized in a tower and on the left was a band playing music.

“Alice this is-“

But before I could finish, the whole room was standing up clapping
up clapping.

“Congratulations” yelled a couple of voices I didn’t recognized
"Congratulations!" a couple of people yelled that I didn't recognize.

And then, I felt Edward’s body getting tense, his expression changed from happiness to anger
“Not today” he whispered
"Not today," he whispered.

I knew what was going on. The only thing that was able to make Edward change that way, that made him so tense and angry, the only thing that annoyed him more than anything, but that made me happy.

Jacob Black was here
here.

“Is Jake isn’t it?” I asked him
"It's Jake, isn't it?" I asked him.

He answered with one nod
nod.

“where is he?” I asked.

“I can smell his scent coming from the main entrance, give me a second I’ll be right back”
be right back."

“No!, Edward I want to talk to him, I’ll be right back”
(It could be "No, Edward, I want to talk to him, I'll be right back." or "No! Edward, I want t talk to him..." Your choice)

“I’m going with you” he said
"I'm going with you," he said.

“No, I have to talk to him alone, please, just let me talk to him" I almost begged him
talk to him," (It sounds like begging to me. It should be "...me talk to him," I begged.)

“Fine” he said after a few seconds “but if you don’t come back in 5 minutes, I’m going to get you”


I nodded and walked towards the main entrance. As I exit the room, I saw both, Jasper and Emmet
exited
with an expression similar to Edward’s, both tense and angry.

I exit the room, leaving all the noise behind and meeting Jacob’s strong black eyes. He was, as usual,
(repeating yourself here...I left the noise behind...maybe?)
shirtless with only a pair of ripped jeans and for the first time, he had shoes on.

“Hi” I said
"Hi," I said. (you have quit a few of errors like this with the comma...I haven't fixed them all)

“Hi” he responded “You look really pretty”
"Hi," he responded. "You look really pretty."(Also lots of errors with periods.)

“Thanks” I said “So what brings you here?”


He stared to the floor and didn’t speak for a while


“I just wanted to know if there was still a chance to stop you from doing this, from marrying that bloodsucker, but I came a little too late”


“Jake I-“

“Bella, this means you are going to be transformed into one of them right?” he interrupted me.

“Yes."

“You know we cannot be friends anymore right?”

“I know, but Jake-“

“How can you do this?” he interrupted me, sounding really angry “After everything I have done for you, he left you, you know, he could do it again. I can’t believe you are going to turn into a monster for him, don’t you care how I feel?, do you have any idea of how it makes me feel you turning into a stupid bloodsucker?” his body was now shaking.

I tried to get closer to him, I wasn’t scared at all now, I wanted to calm him down.

The only thing I could think about while I was laying on the floor was that there were going to be some big problems now, as I saw Edward, Jasper and Emmet walking to the main entrance.

Mod edit: Removed all caps from title.