@RavenLord - the entire novella is written in second person.
As for the line, it's too vague for me to be interested. "The thing" brings nothing to mind, and it would be better if it was replaced by a specific word. "Even though he knew would not be there" is superfluous and grammatically incorrect (you skipped an "it" after "knew").
I would recommend cutting the line off at the second comma, and continuing the rest in the next sentence. As an addition, you could get a heavier effect out of your first paragraph by telling or showing us how Cedric feels about searching for this "thing" even though he knows it's missing. ("Cedric hurried down the corridor, searching wildly for the [object]. It had to be there. It couldn't be missing -- couldn't!")
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