Feel free to comment on the favorite line of the person above you too c: This isn't a critique game, but it's always nice to hear what we've done right!
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Right now I'm working on The Autumn Door, and while most of it is "oh my god don't look" levels of cringe, one of my favorite (if cringe-y) lines so far this draft is:
At first, she only saw one rider. His horse was great and black as night, dappled with stars in its coat, and he wielded a shining sword that seemed to glow with the reflection of the moon itself. He looked impossibly large, cloaked in power, and the crown on his head shone with the dull light of ancient gold. His horse’s hooves beat the path, leaving searing black marks in its wake, and as he raised his sword, he screamed in wordless, terrible rage.
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