@Omnom, it looks great! The only thing I’d say though is that Malik is the only one escorting Autumn, and I’m not sure if Malik would reveal himself to them. He’d want Autumn to slip into the group quietly and say that the council had sent him late. The Conclave wouldn’t openly help a group of Council riders on their journey I don’t think.
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winter you are an adorable bean and I love your bad social awareness xD ~Omni omni played robin hood, stole winter's brain cell ~Silver winter is the only person who would survive the machine uprising ~Europa
@winterwolf0100 so I spoke with Scar about this a bit, and we agreed that the conclave thinks this lich monarch is a problem for them as well, so sometime off-screen, they sent a few riders to meet with Malik (maybe even the person in Europa's post, unless you have different plans for that person) to give him different instructions, even if that means the conclave is not acting in the shadows anymore. I think this will also make it easier for Malik to blend in with the group if he wants to (maybe if the Conclave told him to), I think this will also help you as a writer so your character isnt just always on the sidelines.
OKAY SO. I discussed this with you guys on the discord and Autumn is dragged to the Council by his conclave keepers and handed over to Loren and co (as on @Omnom’s post, I assume i haven’t read it yet and I just woke like c’mon guys can you not lol which means Edana can still catch Malik skulking around.
ALSO.
MONTAGE TO EDANA’S HOME TOWN?!
Lemme know if there’s something you want me to mention!
AND THEN I’m gonna have Loren’s mother attack him which gives us a week in Asyna to do plotty stuff! Like Edana catching Malik skulking around? multiple times And eventually she just, like, tackles him to the ground?! And Loren has to try and intervene while recovering from being injured wow you jerks couldn’t even wait a damn week! lol
AND IF ANYTHING ELSE COMES UP I SHALL ADD IT HERE! Maybe. If I remember to lol.
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Hey @ScarlettFire I'm afraid I wont be able to continue with this SB, I have a lot on my plate at the moment, and I'm not able to keep up with whats going on. And I'm afraid I'm going to let people down when it is my turn to post again because I haven't been able to follow everything as well as I would like. I hope you can forgive me. If I didn't have lots of work and my own story and other things to keep up with then I would be down for it! You know I would! I did enjoy doing it when I could though.
Oh I was thinking that if you wanted to, we could always keep Luna as an NPC until you're ready to start reading/writing again. That's only if you want to, of course, or we could just write Luna out of the story. Whatever works best for you
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