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jedigeek wrote:You don't hear these things I am saying because you are blinded by her, by her lies, her deceit. The way she treats your relationship when your not around. But you wouldn't see that would you !! Though they all talk you don't hear it!! You don't listen to them or me !! YOU JUST DON'T LISTEN

jedigeek wrote:You Just Don't listen


You are perfect , perfect for me and I know it. You are everything I want in a guy and then some. You are sweet kind and loving, you mean more to me than anyone. You are handsome, with perfect looks from head to toe. I love all your quirky habits especially the one where you chew on your bottom lip when you are nervous or under pressure or your fake laugh you use when your sad.

Though I feel this way you are with her. This breaks my heart it really does because she doesn't know you like me. She doesn't care for you like I do. When I try to prove this to you ,you don't listen if you would just listen. You will hear the sounds of silent sobs that belong to me because she's ruining you and I have to stand back and watch.

You don't hear these things I am saying because you are blinded by her, by her lies, her deceit the way she treats your relationship when your not around. But you wouldn't see that would you !! Though they all talk you don't hear it!! You don't listen to them or me !! YOU JUST DON'T LISTEN

This is really short but it was just a feeling that I needed to write about and I liked it so I decided to submit it !!!
Please review though because I want to hear feed back so I can maybe go off of this !!!

- Jedigeek

jedigeek wrote:
You Just Don't listen



You are perfect , perfect for me and I know it. You are everything I want in a guy and then some. You are sweet, kind and loving; you mean more to me than anyone. You are handsome, with perfect looks from head to toe. I love all your quirky habits; especially the one where you chew on your bottom lip when you are nervous or under pressure or your fake laugh you use when your sad.

Though I feel this way, you are with her. This breaks my heart it really does because she doesn't know you like me. (awkward sentence, maybe break it up into two?) She doesn't care for you like I do. When I try to prove this to you ,you don't listen if you would just listen. You will hear the sounds of silent sobs that belong to me because she's ruining you and I have to stand back and watch.

You don't hear these things I am saying because you are blinded by her, by her lies, her deceit, the way she treats your relationship when your not around. But you wouldn't see that would you !! Though they all talk you don't hear it!! You don't listen to them or me !! YOU JUST DON'T LISTENYou just don't listen!