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I think I've lost my mind.



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Wed Apr 15, 2020 1:32 pm
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I sat there naked
Under a tree
With my mind so sacred,
how my thoughts felt to me.

An Aggregate of cells
This worthless body
God hath not
a life like me.

So, can I say
He hath no say
In the vague things
Like the inevitable destiny?

Or shall I say
He hath no soul?
That he is the devil
- The mischief of progeny?

Forsaken have I
These thoughts of mine
For I fear too
the obscurity of his presence.
Last edited by Gravitem on Tue Apr 28, 2020 6:01 pm, edited 1 time in total.
"Mesa tired"

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Mon Apr 20, 2020 8:43 am
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Faith

Oh lord I do not believe
Will you convince and guide me?
Your presence was never my sight
Will your grace let this be?

Long have I waited
And longer will I wait.
My patience was never my strength
But will you come and grant this to me?

Faith has let me down
A thousand times I could count.
But numbers have no meaning
A lesson I have been taught.

Look down at me
With wonder waiting eyes.
Acknowledge my existence and,
Maybe in peace I could lie.
"Mesa tired"

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Mon Apr 27, 2020 9:05 am
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Grey clouds
Roaring thunder
Too loud
for the land down under.
"Mesa tired"

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Tue Apr 28, 2020 4:42 pm
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Liberty says...



Spoiler! :
Myth! You've got some interesting poems so far. Your latest one is pretty short, but I like the imagery of it. The second one's last lines,
Acknowledge my existence and,
Maybe in peace I could lie.

were especially nice. Beautiful! I'm looking forward to more poetry!
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Tue Apr 28, 2020 4:48 pm
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Hehe I'm glad to hear you like 'em. Yeah the third one was just something that came to me when I thought I wanted to write something.
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Thu Apr 30, 2020 7:15 am
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I'm in solitude
because that's just where I am.
Everyone is but,
They just have people to join them.

I wish I was like everybody else
But where's the fun in that?
That's what everyone else thinks
But I wish I could just sit them down and tell them,

Struggle isn't fun,
Don't confuse it.
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Thu Apr 30, 2020 7:17 am
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Lost am I,
Show me the way.
Be sure to make it bright.
"Mesa tired"

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Thu Apr 30, 2020 7:17 am
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Look me in the eye and tell me I'm wrong,
You just wanted me for fun,
And I wanted you for the touch.
"Mesa tired"

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