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a time for peace



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Tue Apr 14, 2020 1:01 am
ellasnotebook says...



#10 I'm not really sure this one makes sense oop

You are so pure and lovely dear-
eyes clear as the sky after rain,
dimples wide enough for me to drink it's tears.
  





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Fri Apr 17, 2020 5:10 am
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alliyah says...



Really liked that last chunk of poem 9 with the bird/noah allusion and also poem 7 !!! wow! that was a really vivid poem, the image of stapling your skin to places so people know you're there -> is just so gory, but also really makes an impression with that metaphor - you're really good at closing poems up too, which is not always easy.
maybe i make up colors for poetic cadence, but i don't think i can ever love someone who doesn't understand that teal is a different color than dark cyan
  





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Sun Apr 19, 2020 4:35 am
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ellasnotebook says...



@alliyah

Thank you! I appreciate it!
  





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Wed Apr 29, 2020 9:17 pm
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Liberty says...



Wow, your poems are amazing, ella! I'm loving the imagery you've woven into each of your poems. #7 is especially deep. I could almost hear my heart clench when I started reading. #10 is really cute, by the way! It has beautiful description. I'm hoping to see more from you even though it's the second last day of NaPo, heh.
LadyBug is the best frister ever <3
(everyone please know that LadyBug's the coolest goose you will ever meet)
(this goose blushes too much)
(lol imagine a blushing goose xD <3)
  








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