Young Writers Society

Hey there! After a brief hiatus, I have returned to YWS and am ready to start reviewing again! Here's what you should know before requesting:

1. I will not review a random chapter of a novel unless your book is structured in such a way that each installment can stand on its own (For example, each chapter is a short story or poem).

2. I will not review fanfiction. If you're desperate for a review on it and feel it's quality enough to be enjoyed by someone outside your fandom, message me.

3.I tend to be an extremely harsh reviewer! If I don't like something or think it's poorly written, I will tell you so. However, in cases like that, I will always support my opinion with plenty of constructive criticism and ways I think you can improve. If you want me to sugar- coat a review and be all cuddly, tell me in your request. Otherwise, please don't take offense if I tear your work apart.

Other than what I've specified above, I'll review most anything. However, my specialties are:

-Poetry
-Prose
-Lyrics
-Fiction
-Weird things. Suffice it to say that if you think it's unusual, I'll probably get it.


So, request away!


-Tori

I'd be honored to be your first review

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love you!

Done! And possibly the longest review I've ever done... too bad it can only count for 100. XD

I call it innovation, you call it juvenile.;p I love some of your improvements, most where suppose to be slang because it was made by ear. But I didn't realize there was a better way to spell them. I changed rhyme scheme because I love doing that in poetry. If the fancy people don't like it, screw them! I like to say my poetry out loud and if it sounds good then I write it down. I didn't understand your punctuation.. That piece is suppose to flow without any stops and punctuation in poetry specifically means stops. Also you didn't quite get my Technic; "A cycle, not a wheel" A wheel moves forward while a cycle does not.

The good: The effort. It was divided among each line then as a whole about everything you could nic pick. It allowed me to read some of the concerns and decide whether I needed something to change. It was harsh and I like that. You didn't spare any feelings which allowed a totally unbiased review. In the end of revising I ended up throwing a whole page of it out and it is significantly better to me now.

Glad I could help!

Ooh, unusual, you might like this.

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Im thinking of submitting it to a contest, so I just want to get any help you can offer with improving it.

Thanks.

-The Unseen