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Would love some reviews please



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Thu Oct 27, 2011 8:41 am
bexy89 says...



Hey everyone,

I'm a newbie and have posted up three parts of the first draft of my current story and would love some reviews! The links (in order) are:

topic89354.html

viewtopic.php?t=89360

viewtopic.php?t=89369

Any comments or constructive criticism is very welcomed.

In return, I will happily review any of the following:

Short Stories (General, FanFic, Romantic and Fantasy)
Novel (same genres as above)
Poetry (Dramatic and Lyric)


Thank you :)
"I'll be writing until I can't write anymore. It's a compulsion with me. I love writing." J.K.Rowling

My Website: www.beckitedford.com
  








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