Young Writers Society

I would like to enter part of the prologue into a competition so I'd love you to be meticulous until the line: His body screamed in unbelievable pain. A white light flashed in front of his lidded eyes. “No,” he screamed, “No, no, no!”

Oh and preferably something about that part of the prologue by 7-10 Feb.

@lehmanf
I'd be glad to review your prologue. I should do that very soon!

Reviewed both of them!

Hi Andrew.

I'd love if you could have a look at my novel. I'm currently on my fifth draft of this story and I'm looking for ways to improve.


- Title: Quest for Fire- Book One- Into the Mists

- Genre: Fantasy\Action\Adventure

- Short Introduction:

The story is based in a fantasy world with dragons, dinosaurs and present day animals (no humans). Zoltar lives in the Shadow Talon dragon tribe. Certain events cause him to embark on a journey to find a mysterious jewel in order to save his tribe from extinction. We met lots of other characters along the way and get into many different situations.


The Quest for Fire - Into the Mists - Prologue

I'm currently on book one of four and I'm 32 chapters in.


Thanks for taking a look in advance.

Best regards
Felistia.

@felistia finished your review! Thanks for the request.

Hey uuuhhh I posted the second chapter of my story and I was watching if you could review? It is by far the worst chapter in the story for various reasons but even so I'd love to get it out of the green room... If you aren't busy, do you think you could give it a look?

https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/StormyZSnifter/The-Tale-of-the-Shade-SquadPart-One-Chapter-Two-153313

@StormyZSnifter
I'll have it reviewed by the end of the week!

Yayy thanks:) apologies in advance for the tangled writing

hey andrew! if you could review my poem take me with you as harshly as you can, i would super appreciate it! thank you!

@dancingontheclouds
I'm no pro at poetry but I'll try my best!
Expect a review by the end of today!

thanks!!

May someone please give me a review on my work Picking through the Rubble Break 2
Thank you.

I'll review that within the week!

hullo sir it is me again...

I am dying to get a review for my third chapter. It is more recent, and hopefully of a higher quality than my 2nd chapter that was a glorified lore-dump lol

Anytime you can get around to it would be really appreciated!

I'm so sorry, I've been so busy, but I'll review both of those tomorrow!