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Wed Jul 06, 2016 9:22 pm
Eternity says...



Request reviews here!

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Hello, Eternity here to Review Your Work!

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Comment Below and I'll get to any works ASAP.
  





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Thu Jul 07, 2016 11:51 pm
yizhongt says...



Hey there,please review:

Heroes of Aldrizhon: Return of the Banished (Prologue & Chapter 1)

If you have the time, could you review the second chapter as well? Thanks in advance!
  





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Thu Jul 07, 2016 11:55 pm
Eternity says...



Sure! I wouldn't mind at all. I'll review both Ch. 1 and Ch. 2 soon. If you look on my wall, I just rescued a kitten so I have to care for it right now but as soon as I clean him up and stuff, I'll get straight to it!
  





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Fri Jul 08, 2016 4:07 am
writerkitty says...



Hello there Eternity! :D
Can you please review, The Myth- Chapter one; Worst day ever.
I know that it already has a lot of reviews, but I'm hoping to re-write it, and I just need more ideas. Also, I'm hoping to show the first chapter to my English teacher, so I really need to make it better.

:D Thank you!!!!

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I saw the picture of the little kitten you rescued, sooo cute!!!! ^_^

Just keep writing, writing, WRITING! :D
  





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Fri Jul 08, 2016 4:10 am
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Hello, dear. Of course!! I'll review it as soon as I can.

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awe thank you. gremlin is such a doll <3
  





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Tue Jul 12, 2016 9:02 pm
Laurenh6 says...



Hi there ! I've just improved Chapter 1 of my story - could you please give me some advice?

Does it keep you hooked? Anything I could improve?

Thank you so much :) :)


Watching


Lauren
  





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Fri Jul 15, 2016 10:25 am
Irrlichtchen says...



Hi :)

Could you maybe review my short story "Clawing stroke"?

Clawing Stroke

I wrote it a while ago and I want to improve it.
Thanks in advance!
  





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Wed Dec 28, 2016 7:07 pm
Eternity says...



Legitimately, I am going to review everything I possibly can for this RD.

Request a review below, and I will get started! My goal for RD is 75 well-written reviews, so the more the better!
  





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Wed Dec 28, 2016 9:29 pm
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Amazing! I will get to those ASAP for RD! Thank you! @CarryOnMrCaulfield
  





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Thu Dec 29, 2016 12:10 am
yizhongt says...



Hey there, could you please review the prologue and first chapter of my fantasy action/adventure story?

Magik: Search for the Tome (Prologue &amp; Chapter 1)

Thanks in advance!
  








This planet has - or rather had - a problem, which was this: most of the people living on it were unhappy for pretty much all of the time. Many solutions were suggested for this problem, but most of these were largely concerned with the movement of small green pieces of paper, which was odd because on the whole it wasn't the small green pieces of paper that were unhappy.
— Douglas Adams, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy