Young Writers Society

This is for the Poetry Pairs Contest. Written by ehte92 and Ranger Hawk. Enjoy!

Ode To Zombies

O zombies, dear zombies
I see you lurking in the alleys
You stammer as you talk
I wish you could moonwalk

Your awfully melting skin
Dripping down from your chin
Your mouth open wide
But I know you are beautiful inside

You stagger and moan
With an ominous tone
That I find simply chilling
But also, it's thrilling

When you call for my brains
I see it all as a game
You are chasing after me
While I play hide and seek

You slink around smelling the air
You hardly have any hair
People shouldn't try to find a cure
Because you won't ever become pure

You've lost your limbs, while half your waist
Is spilling out though tightly laced
Your spleen has been sewed into place
But meanwhile--splash! falls half your face

O zombies, dear zombies
Your green flesh and bony knees
The way you tear people apart
And utter cries as you eat their hearts

I cannot stand it anymore
The call of the dead I cannot ignore
Your rotting mouth leers as you mock and spurn me
I want to be you, so please--turn me!

This captures the, creepiness of zombies. I was looking around the room as I read this. I am so glad zombies are not real *shudders* Typically, i don't watch any horror movies about zombies, murdering girls etc. But I do like to read some really weird poems. Like Edgar Allen Poe, his work is good. Like yours, yours is good. And my favorite lines just have to be:

You've lost your limbs, while half your waist
Is spilling out though tightly laced
Your spleen has been sewed into place
But meanwhile--splash! falls half your face

Very, very good job. * Looks around the room to make sure no zombies from Ranger's poem has crept out to eat her*.

Ahahahahaha! This is amazing, my friend!
I really don't have much to say about the poem in general, since I suck at reviewing poetry, but the content and imagery is just so vivid!
Amazing and again I say, "Amazing!"
Jenth

I love the imagery of it, but I don't find this poem creepy or scary. In fact, it was just an ode. Sorry, but if it was creepiness you wanted then you failed with me. However I find this poem more humorous than anything. It reminds me of a little kid's straightforward style. NOT that I'm calling it like a little kid's poem. 'I wish you could moonwalk.' -favorite line by far!

I would wish that you would've put punctuation in this. Actually, that's my request. And finally, the last two lines ended in "me". Bad you! Haha, joking. Basically just change a word in the last two lines to make it rhyme (Look I'm a poet and I didn't know it.) and then we'll be fine. (See! I did it again lolz).

Good job and that made me smile to read. I like humorous poems today.

However I find this poem more humorous than anything.

Great! That's what we were going for, more of a humorous take on a horror theme than trying to scare people. (:

Thanks for all the comments, guys, glad you enjoyed!

Sorry,but if it was creepiness you wanted then you failed with me. However I find this poem more humorous than anything.

We wanted it to be humorous so i think that we did not fail. Thank you everyone for the reviews.

I don't see anything that needs to be improved or corrected, so on to the good stuff. I absolutely love this! I had to restrain myself from laughing since I'm in the middle of my Geometry class. This is very well written and well thought out. You really capture everything that comes to my mind when I think of zombies. Finally some good light for our weary flesh-eaters! XD Great job overall, keep writing!

-Liz

What a different concept of poem - Zombies! Goood work man! Keep with it.

Maybe(in the first stanza), "Although I wish..." instead of "I wish." The I wish just makes it seemed like your insulting zombies at first. Other than that, you made my morning. :9

I just made a mistake..."It seemed like *your*" oops. Didn't me and Ranger have a talk on this? :3
*you're
That's better.

But, great job on the poem guys. I find it hard to imagine that Ranger Hawk did this. Seems more ehte style!
--Skis

This was hilarious. xP

But, great job on the poem guys. I find it hard to imagine that Ranger Hawk did this. Seems more ehte style!

No, no, no, no... This is our mixed effort. We both did it together and with equal collaboration.

Thanks everyone for the comments. (:

Thanks everyone for the reviews! Glad you liked it.

I find it hard to imagine that Ranger Hawk did this. Seems more ehte style!

Haha we seem to actually have pretty similar poetry-writing styles, based on our former poems.

Haha this is great!
I love having a break from the emo poems and this great totally opposite in the way you wrote it! I also like how (You may not have realized this) the MJ remarks like 'moonwalking' (obviously) and 'it's thrilling' as in Thriller.
Really good work guys,
SweetMoments

This was a very interesting piece of poetry that I enjoyed reading. It was very unique and I liked how you described the zombie falling apart.

Wow. a poem about zombies?.
How creative of you.. is that the only poem you've written so far?