Goin' Nowhere (Very short and and very terrible)

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Sureal
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Fri Jul 15, 2005 3:17 pm
Sureal says... · Fri Jul 15, 2005 3:17 pm
This is my first (and more than likely - only) piece of poetry on here...


Goin' Nowhere

Light above,
Fire below,
Where d’yah think,
I’m gonna go?

Pee dot,
Ess dot,
Satan is a mo’ fo’.



Yes.
Now you know why I never write poetry ;).
I wrote the above just for you.
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Emma
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Fri Jul 15, 2005 3:41 pm
Emma says... · Fri Jul 15, 2005 3:41 pm
Hee hee,

I see why too. :P

Good poem anyhow..
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Sureal
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Sun Jul 17, 2005 12:55 pm
Sureal says... · Sun Jul 17, 2005 12:55 pm
I wrote this whilst wondering around the theme park on holiday. I'm still not sure what possessed me to post it up though ;).
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Sun Jul 17, 2005 7:46 pm
Harley says... · Sun Jul 17, 2005 7:46 pm
Pee dot,
Ess dot,
Satan is a mo’ fo’.


i love that so much :P
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antigone
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Tue Jul 19, 2005 7:19 pm
antigone says... · Tue Jul 19, 2005 7:19 pm
Um. It is rather terrible. :)

But I love pee dot ess dot. It made me laugh.
Siempre, siempre: jardin de mi agonia,
tu cuerpo fugitivo para siempre,
la sangre de tus venas en mi boca,
tu boca ya sin luz para mi muerte.
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Rei
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Tue Jul 19, 2005 7:23 pm
Rei says... · Tue Jul 19, 2005 7:23 pm
Yes, I can see why you normally don't write poetry. But this isn't terrible. It amused me.
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Sureal
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Tue Jul 19, 2005 8:14 pm
Sureal says... · Tue Jul 19, 2005 8:14 pm
You should see some of my over attemps at poetry (I had to write 'em for school).
This is probably my best ever piece ;).
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Muse
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Tue Jul 19, 2005 8:20 pm
Muse says... · Tue Jul 19, 2005 8:20 pm
it's...uhm....beautiful?
"Sometimes we see a cloud that's dragonish,
A vapour sometimes like a bear or lion,
A towered citadel, a pendant rock,
A forked mountain, or blue promontory,
With trees upon't that nod unto the world,And mock our eyes with air.."
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Rei
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Wed Jul 20, 2005 1:05 am
Rei says... · Wed Jul 20, 2005 1:05 am
Oh, don'tcha just hate it when you have to do creative writing for school. It's the worst. Especially length restrictions
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Ieatworms
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Fri Jul 22, 2005 5:42 am
Ieatworms says... · Fri Jul 22, 2005 5:42 am
Hey! Give yourself some credit. Add another six verses and you have a verifiable rap in the works.
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Quiz
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 8:31 am
Quiz says... · Fri Oct 14, 2005 8:31 am
I agree with Ms. (Mrs.?) Worms; get some more verses in theree and there could actually be something to this!

I like it all, it's really amusing. Not really deep or powerful, but entertaining!

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Twinkling Starz
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:02 am
Twinkling Starz says... · Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:02 am
Haha, very short and amusing!

The pee dot ess dot made me smile...
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bluecows
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Fri Oct 14, 2005 1:21 pm
bluecows says... · Fri Oct 14, 2005 1:21 pm
what's a mo' fo' ?

have a nice day
bluecows :-s
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