If I fall, will you catch me?

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If I fall, will you catch me?

If I trip, will you help me up?

If I stumble, will you break my fall?

If I spill my life to you,
Will you share yours?

If my heart breaks,
Will you put the pieces back together?

If I fall for you,
Will you catch me?

This poem is just me using my imagination, meaning its not really real. I just pictured a couple together and put words together...[and so far it is the shortest poem I've ever done...weird lol.] Anywho, let me know what you think, please!!
Last edited by babygirl12 on Fri Aug 20, 2010 2:24 pm, edited 1 time in total.
I dare you to move
I dare you to move
I dare you to lift yourself up off the floor
I dare you to move
I dare you to move
Like today never happened
Today never happened...
Before. ---Dare you to move by, Switchfoot---




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I like it I really do i think this is a wonderful poem.




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That's a nice poem.
If I fall,
For you,
Will you catch me?

I don't think you really need the comma after "fall". The line break already supplies the pause there.
If my heart breaks,
Will you put the pieces back together?

I like this part. It really helps get your point across in this poem.
And as for the fact that you used your imagination for this, good job!
Do we not all agree to call rapid thought and noble impulse by the name of inspiration?
- George Eliot


"It takes ten times as long to put yourself back together as it does to fall apart."




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I like this poem, but I do have a few suggestions...

If I fall,
will you catch me?

If I trip,
will you help me up?

If I stumble,
will you break my fall?

If I spill my life to you,
Will you share yours?

If my heart breaks,
Will you put the pieces back together?could try "Will you put IT back to together"

If I fall for you,
Will you catch me?


I think that this is a good poem talking about what people fear and wonder before going into a relationship... Although the statement "If I fall, will you catch?" is kinda overused, you use it well here...

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thanks guys!!! x) And will do!!!
I dare you to move
I dare you to move
I dare you to lift yourself up off the floor
I dare you to move
I dare you to move
Like today never happened
Today never happened...
Before. ---Dare you to move by, Switchfoot---



Life, although it may only be an accumulation of anguish, is dear to me, and I will defend it.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein