A FAIR JUDGE

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jossymaiye
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Thu Apr 21, 2005 4:10 pm
jossymaiye says... · Thu Apr 21, 2005 4:10 pm
How long shall you judge unjustly,
And accept the persons of the wicked?
Defend the poor and needy,
Take them out of oppression.
They know not,
Neither do they understand.
They walk in the street of ignorance.
All the earth are out of course.
For now do you judge,
But you shall be buried like them,
And fall as one of their princes.
i know you are dry
but that does`nt mean you should cry
get up and fly
fly reallly high
up to the deep blue sky
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rachel eaw
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Sat May 14, 2005 12:37 pm
rachel eaw says... · Sat May 14, 2005 12:37 pm
this is brilliant
how did u get the idea for it
i wish i could write as well as u
keep writing
every 1 hates me
even myself
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emotion_less
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Sat May 14, 2005 2:48 pm
emotion_less says... · Sat May 14, 2005 2:48 pm
It's a good concept. There's not really anything I would change about it, except, next time, could you not capitalize all your letters in your title? It really didn't seem necessary at all to the poem, and I didn't expect to be serious about it before reading it.
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Snoink
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Sun May 15, 2005 7:30 am
Snoink says... · Sun May 15, 2005 7:30 am
It is a good poem, but it seems to lack a good ending to it. FOr instance, you develop it well, and then you just leave it hanging. Why? Conclude it.
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For in everything it is no easy task to find the middle ... anyone can get angry—that is easy—or give or spend money; but to do this to the right person, to the right extent, at the right time, with the right motive, and in the right way, that is not for everyone, nor is it easy; wherefore goodness is both rare and laudable and noble.
— Aristotle