Short but sweet. I'd suggest, though, adding in a line between the end of the poem and the dedication. And since I'm not sure if everyone here knows what Columbine was (a very significant number of members come from outside the United States) I found a link that can explain it:
But like I said, this is short but sweet. The poem says a lot without having to delve into dense stanzas that, in the end, mean little anyway. Moreover, the seeming contradiction in the poem is thought provoking.
yeah, ok, this needs flesh for me to bite into. right now it's a very short, sweet cracker that is more like a poetic statement with line breaks than a poem. but....like i said, it's a good cracker. like a ritz...
People say I love you all the time - when they say, ‘take an umbrella, it’s raining,’ or ‘hurry back,’ or even ‘watch out, you’ll break your neck.’ There are hundreds of ways of wording it - you just have to listen for it, my dear. — John Patrick, The Curious Savage
