Short but sweet. I'd suggest, though, adding in a line between the end of the poem and the dedication. And since I'm not sure if everyone here knows what Columbine was (a very significant number of members come from outside the United States) I found a link that can explain it:
But like I said, this is short but sweet. The poem says a lot without having to delve into dense stanzas that, in the end, mean little anyway. Moreover, the seeming contradiction in the poem is thought provoking.
yeah, ok, this needs flesh for me to bite into. right now it's a very short, sweet cracker that is more like a poetic statement with line breaks than a poem. but....like i said, it's a good cracker. like a ritz...
That's just what translation is, I think. That's all speaking is. Listening to the other and trying to see past your own biases to glimpse what they're trying to say. Showing yourself to the world, and hoping someone else understands. — Ramy (Babel by R. F. Kuang)
