Sensuret wasn’t sure what to make of that, this didn’t look at all like a demon.
Instead of the comma, maybe use a semi-colon instead?
“I'm a (?) dream demon.”
The thing sat down, and the old rickety chair it [s]had[/s] chose didn’t creak at all,
I really liked the way this was composed mostly of dialouge: I'm not one to like a lot of description, so this was a very enjoyable read for me.
One more suggestion: maybe talk about your main character's emotions a little more when the demon is giving him more power? As it is, Sensuret seems a little unsurprised that the Demon is doing this for him. Isn't it a big deal?
I don't have much else to say, as this was already well written in the first place. Nice work!
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