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Mage Chronicles: Draft Two



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Wed Nov 08, 2017 12:25 pm
ShadowPrincess16 says...



Hey all! So, I first posted Mage Chronicles here about a year (maybe less?) ago. I've since completely revamped it and finished it for the second time. I'm looking for someone to read through it and pretty much point out anything that needs fixing. Grammar, plot issues, romance issues, worldbuilding. Whatever needs to be fixed, go ahead and point it out.

Mage Chronicles is a fantasy/romance that deals with LGBT relationships and family dynamics.
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“wanting what you could not have led to misery and madness”
― Cassandra Clare, Clockwork Prince
  








Did you ever hear the Tragedy of Darth Plagueis the wise? I thought not. It's not a story the Jedi would tell you. It's a Sith legend. Darth Plagueis was a Dark Lord of the Sith, so powerful and so wise he could use the Force to influence the midichlorians to create life... He had such a knowledge of the dark side that he could even keep the ones he cared about from dying. The dark side of the Force is a pathway to many abilities some consider to be unnatural. He became so powerful... the only thing he was afraid of was losing his power, which eventually, of course, he did. Unfortunately, he taught his apprentice everything he knew, then his apprentice killed him in his sleep. It's ironic he could save others from death, but not himself.
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