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Fri Aug 25, 2017 12:30 am
ajruby12 says...



Hey guys! I've been posting this novel in the forum, but here's the full version, if any of you are interested in reading it. Any comments or edits are appreciated.

https://drive.google.com/open?id=1X64lw ... 3CF3A5CCsw
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Fri Aug 25, 2017 8:02 pm
Lumi says...



Yo, AJ!

I'll definitely try to look over this and give you some overarching comments on theme and characterization (as those are my main critiques with novels, I feel.) That said, I wanna give a little nod to those who want to click the link and make sure you guys use fake names on Google! We want you to stay as safe as possible! :)
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Sat Aug 26, 2017 1:53 am
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Ha, oops. I copy and pasted the novel from a formated copy.

But I would really appreciate any comments that you can give! I'm a novel newbie, so I'm still working on the art of writing in that context. :)
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I always knew that deep down in every human heart, there is mercy and generosity. No one is born hating another person because of the color of his skin, or his background, or his religion. People must learn to hate, and if they can learn to hate, they can be taught to love, for love comes more naturally to the human heart than its opposite.
— Nelson Mandela, Long Walk to Freedom