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Snoink · 2008-01-05T23:31:35Z

EDIT: FREAK is gone! I told you it was for a limited time only. :P Anyway, it's been downloaded 62 times and I've gotten nine critiques, so I am somewhat happy. If you are one of the people who, for some bizarre reason, had downloaded FREAK to your computer and have been working on a critique, feel free to post it. If you're one of the people who came here, hoping to read it, and are thusly disappointed, well... maybe it'll be published soon. Thanks for everything! :D ORIGINAL POST: Okay. This is FREAK. The first seven chapters stink of suckitude, so I'm hoping to get a general comment on this before submitting it (I have fixed most everything else, I think). And, because I am lazy, I am posting it here, where I can put attachments. So! What is it about? When a freak living in an overcrowded slum is sold to a wealthy politician to be a maidservant of his teenage daughter Sadie, she expects life to be easier. But when she begins her service in the house, she quickly realizes she’s trapped within a feuding family. At first she tries to ignore this and continue her job in peace, but when she gets involved in an affair with the politician, the family, already divided, is torn apart. With politics becoming even more intense and Sadie’s impending marriage, it’s up to the freak to bring the family back together again, if she can. The first seven chapters are about 13K words all together. Also, this is in manuscript format. All things that are underlined would be, in the novel, italicized. Thanks a lot in advance!

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Sat Jan 24, 2009 8:21 pm

emeraldmaria says... · Sat Jan 24, 2009 8:21 pm

WHERE IS THE STORY?!?!?!!?!?!?!?!?! MY HEAD IS ABOUT TO EXPLODE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Sun Jan 25, 2009 4:27 am

Snoink says... · Sun Jan 25, 2009 4:27 am

I took it down. ^^

Eek, I don't think I'm looking for any critiques on this story anymore. Or at least not on the beginning chapters. Thanks anyway for those who critiqued!

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