Yeah doesn't really need critique but opinions so hope this doesn't conflict with the 2 reviews per post (If that is still her) .
But yeah just got an idea from an old piece of writing I did. If you choose to give ya opinion on it I want every little detail that came to your mind, whether or not it sounds Cliché or copied off anything else.
Pretty much from posting this and watching merlin the other day they kinda clash but urgh.
Alright the story might go something like this:
* - If your power excedes your life force you can eventually die. You can take someone's by hating them or give someone it by loving them. Its why love will become a big thing in the book between those who have the power of magic.
Prologue -
In this land or whatever (yeah good starting I know) this race of magic wielders dwells in the north in this land in which no others living in that world, or land, have been to. To the west of this place a race similar to Dragons called Avaddons (Got name from the hebrew word Abbadon) Live. To the south humans (had to include them as usual) live and might be divided in two later on in the story. But generally what happens is while scouting out areas the humans somehow come across the land to the northeast with those magical people and whilst the people greet them as guests the humans are greed-stricken (if that is a word) and want more land and the place looks good. So a war starts and some of them join the humans as assassins to hunt them down. Eventually the land they lived becomes war-torn and deserted and even though you think they'd win the magic users go on the run.
Where the story starts -
Most of them have been killed and while there may be some in hiding those known are about to be finished off by the assassins. (Just to add in each person in this world has a life force, and the stronger it is the stronger you are pretty much). As one is left he leaves his son at the door of a house and gives most of his life force* to the child (the child is special, while everyone has 1 life force, he has 2). While escaping the father dies.
Rest -
The child grows up without knowing his powers and around the late teen years he falls for this girl and they grow close and without knowing takes her life force and is left asking himself what just happened. He soon discovers his powers and trains in the darkness being hunted by the kingdom. Eventually he meets up with others of their kind and begins a counter.
What I want to get out of this idea is just a one guy (main character) taking on hundreds, possibly thousands and coming out with a few bruises or scratches, it sounds unbelieve but I think I could possibly pull it off.
Well yeah, tell me what you think.
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