Young Writers Society

I'm sitting alone
Im my own home
Wondering where the hell
everyone has gone

Did they finally abandon me?
Do they finally not see me?

I'm a ghost amoung shadows
I'm a ghost amoung shadows

Look at me and tell me you won't leave me
I can't be alone
I need someone

Somebody please Help me
Help me
Help me

I'm a ghost amoung shadows.
I'm a ghost amoung shadows.



Tell me what you think of the poem, what do you think it's about and any errors or suggestions that would help improve my poem.
Thanks
sara

p.s. in the line 'somebody please Help me' the H is supposed to be capitalized.

First of all, 'Amoung' is supposed to be 'Among'.

Well, this is the skeleton of a poem. You have a concept and an Idea, but you need imagery, more details and emotion. We need to know exactly what she's feeling rather than a list of questions she has. You know?
For the imagery, just add some subtle descriptions of where she is, what she remembers, that kinda stuff.

And...why did everyone leave her? Just wondering.

Keep writing,
Ayra