I dunno if I'm supposed to post this here but I'm struggling so here we go:
The bare basics of my story goes like this. There's a sister who has two younger brothers. The three of them are kept in an organization against their will. One day the sister gets a chance to escape and takes the first brother with her. She could have tried to save the second brother, but she chose not to. As soon as she's out, however, she feels guilty and wants to save him. Years later, she and the first brother are still trying to find ways to save the second brother. The sister is bitter and controlling towards the first brother, so eventually, he leaves and joins another organization that has sworn to take down the organization that's holding his brother.
Ending One (Original Ending):
The first brother ends up fighting the second brother. The battle ends in a draw, and the organization that first brother joined has become corrupt and captures both of the brothers. The first brother is sent on a mission against his will with the second brother as a motivational hostage (blackmail hostage? "We'll kill him if you don't do what we say" hostage?)
The sister ends up breaking in and saving the second brother, and the first brother is saved by a friend of hers. Everyone reunites and makes up and apologizes and sorts out their issues and stuff.
Ending Two (New Ending):
The first brother ends up being captured by the original organization he escaped from and it's up to the sister to save both of her brothers. She saves them through self-sacrifice (she basically dies).
My problems with the first ending...
It's too typical. I don't want everything to work out perfectly in the end. I want the "bad guy" to win a little bit. I don't want my characters to have plot armor (or whatever it's called).
My problems with the second ending...
The sister doesn't resolve her conflicts with her brothers. She never gets to apologize for treating the first brother unfairly, or to the second brother for leaving him behind in the first place. Those conflicts need to be resolved, right? And ending where she just sacrifices herself feels empty, right?
I don't know. But I don't like the conclusions to my plot that I've thought up so far.
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