So I have this species in my story who have the innate ability to fly. But one day this ability goes away. The crew are tasked with going and fixing this. This is my description of the first time they meet a member of that species:
"They were greeted by a short dumpy figure who shoved the enormous arched door open, while barely even reaching the doorknob. This wasn’t any great indication concerning the figure, however, as there were at least two metres between the doorknob and the ground. As the figure started shuffling towards them, Margo realised it was doing so in a series of short hops. Even Treego Dart had to be forced to admit this highly resembled the movement of a frog.
“Jungle Force?” The being’s voice was deep and gravelly, which felt massively out of proportion to its rather diminutive stature. Its height, it turned out, was not much taller than that of a child.
“Yes … yes, we are,” Chip said. He seemed to be searching for something, presumably a name or a title with which to address this being. It had no legs, its arms were long and its fingers looked dextrous. It seemed to waver slightly in the breeze, but also didn’t seem at all put off by this fact. In fact there was a fluid sway to how it held itself that suggested it revelled in the air’s movement."
I don't know what made me at first want to make the species seem pitiful, but I guess everyone has subconscious biases. I have tried to edit this to give more dignity to the species and I'm going back through the rest of the chapter too.
If anyone has or knows anyone with a disability (having no legs or other mobility issues would be best) it would be amazing if you could ask them if this seems offensive. Or even if you don't, the whole point of this story is going to be not to generalise people, so I want to take all measures possible to ensure I don't.
Thanks in advance,
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