Hi, guys!
I wrote a scene where the two main characters finally kiss, and I would like some feedback on it. I've never done romance before, so I don't know if it's okay. If you have time, I would love if you could tell me if it was acceptable. Or if it's not, tell me how I could improve.
Here it is: "He leans forward that last inch, and then our lips are pressed together. The kiss is unlike any I've ever experienced, warm and molten. It's as if it has become lava, causing a slow moving but passionate sensation to ooze through my body. One of his arms unwinds from my waist to caress my cheek. How can something feel so great?
My lips respond on their own, meshing against his to deepen the smoldering tenderness. My hands find their way to his hair and intertwine with it. The strands are wonderfully soft.
I'm lost in the warmth for what seems like an hour, but is probably only a minute more. When he has to pull away so we can both breathe, I'm almost disappointed. It's not like I can drag in air any more sufficiently now that he's not kissing me. It's all caught in my throat."
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