The story of your life

Ha. Experimentalism. And this is done right. Nice job Karzkin.

When a poem in this style is done correctly, there's nothing a reviewer needs to say except admire its construction.

Often these poems are products of luck or careful deliberation. Don't dabble too long in these though.

Next time, try to incorporate new elements, new changes to form, etc. But be wary of experimenting for too long.

that was good but if you wrote a little more and less nothings it would have been waaaaay better

Wow, I've never seen something like this before. But it's pretty cool, even if it kind of made me feel insignificant and boring:D And, there are indeed, a lot of nothings. Less is more?:D

This was quite interesting to read. But I liked reading it...it has something to it that for some reason drags you in. I have never seen anything like this before good job!

Anyways! I liked it! Keep up the good work!

KJR

Well, over all it was interesting. I loved it. Well, It was creepy and I understand the consept of this poem and I think that you did it right. Many people do this kind of poetry wrong, but you did it awsome!!! But mabey next time you can use less "Nothing" Maybe more "Something" But thats just me. You ahve your own kind of writing and I like that. Keep it up!!! and if you think that something is perfect the way it is dont listen to other people. But if they have tips or things you can chang, I would listen because you might learn something new. Next time, (And this is a tip) You should just use more words, and less "nothing" I liked where you said the middle part so that you can understand what the person is trying to say or what the author is trying to say. That their life is different and that "Nothing" is in their life that is different than yours, but I understand everything that you are trying to say. I found no, spelling mistakes, good job with that. I found no paragraph mistakes. And I understand why you did not fill up the whole page. You did not want to confuse the reader,right? well, anyway this is a summary....

You did a great job with the poem. Just use less "Nothing' Maybe and make sure you listen to your instincs. Thats all!!!
I loved it!

~Pixie~
liv,laugh,glow

Something like this is really art. I really love its simplicity and strong message regardless. There's really not much else I can say, but it's a great thing when a writer can put something like this together (I liked this piece by the way). Keep writing!
-Alex

Hi K. Thanks for your comment on my wall...I will write a Haiku one day...
Anyway. I can't even say this was an interesting 'read': there was nothing to 'read'. It was scrollings of nothing. However, that having being said, this was pure genius. You so aptly focused on the tedious nothingness of our lives: we are all made so wonderfully, our brain possessing mindblowing capacities, yet we live for so few ( in the grand scheme of things) years that we accomplish very little and don't live to our true potential as humans... Huge sentence - * gasps for air* lol. This was brillantly exectuted and a lengthy piece of prose wouldn't have conveyed your message any better. Well done, look forward to your next piece.
~ Alia

Hmm. Interesting. Never seen anything like it, but that kinda made it cool. It does make you feel really insignificant, though, which, if you think about it, though, you are. All the billions of people on Earth, the tiny speck that Earth is in this huge, infinite universe....yeah, you get the point. Definitely a one-of-a-kind piece.

Wow. I'll just add to all of the comments. This piece actually made me feel really sad for some reason. Like, life has no purpose, we have no meaning here. And, for me, I don't think that's true. But, then I really thought about it, and I think the piece was just trying to tell us how insignificant ONE person's life is. It's small. It's just one little thing.

Overall, this was something I have NEVER seen before. Good job for that!