I'm new here and 16, but I love writing anything and everything. This is a poem I'm writing, but I need help with word choice. Can anyone give me feed back?
She looked into the mirror
and wiped all of her makeup off-
revealing her imperfections.
A wave of nauseating sadness rolled over her.
The monster
looming within growled.
The monster
is a consuming fire
that will stop at nothing.
She fell into a deeper and darker place
where only the most devilish monsters dwell.
The empty night
filled her ears
as the candle flickered
on the vanity.
There was a giant hole
where her heart should have been.
She smiled sadly.
The flames from the candle danced
wildly as she took a ragged breath.
The girl with the blue eyes wiped away
one last salty tear-
never to cry again.
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