Okay, so please be as harsh as possible. This is a remake of a short-story I wrote my freshmen year as an English grade (edited, of course). The two main characters are minor characters from a story I am writing with my friends. Hope you like.
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Melody threw herself down amidst the moving grass, staring up at the grey sky with worry in her blue eyes. She looked sideways at her twin, Serenity, who was playing a little way off with their pet dog, Poofles. Letting out a sigh of irritation, she returned her gaze back towards the clouds, wondering why she had even agreed to come out into the fields. The storm that was coming was supposed to be the worst one they’ve had in a while and they needed to get back before it started up.
Melody closed her eyes and let the thoughts run through her head as she listened to her sister giggling and shouting. Time slowly crept by and she had just drifted off into a slumber when she felt a splash of water on her skin. Opening her eyes, she was welcomed with the sight of a million raindrops falling towards her. She jumped up and looked around for her sister, finding Serenity a little farther from town than she had been before Melody had gone to sleep.
Already drenched, she walked slowly through the rain towards her sister and their dog. The rain began to thicken as she reached them and lightning started to flash somewhere in the distance.
“Come on, Serenity. We should get home before we catch a cold,” Melody told her sister, her arms wrapped around her body as she began to shiver from a strong wind.
Serenity looked at her sister with a sad look, her black hair clinging to her skin and adding to the mood. “I guess… I was having so much fun though.”
Melody rolled her eyes and turned around to face back towards town. “Mom and Dad are probably worried enough as it is. We didn’t even tell them we were going to come out here. Get Poofles and let’s start heading back.”
Serenity nodded in reply, though still a little sad that her fun was ruined. Turning around, she reached to pick Poofles up when a flash of lightning struck somewhere nearby. The following thunder was resounding and caused both girls to jump and squeal in fear.
Poofles also seemed to have been frightened by the noise and, instead of jumping into Serenity’s arms, ran away from the girls and towards an old decrepit castle that used to rule over their town of Brooks. He yelped along the way, the grass parting before him in an effort escape being trampled on.
“Poofles!” Serenity shouted in shock, frozen as she stared after the fleeing dog. Then, she began chasing after him, slipping in the mud that had suddenly appeared as she ran.
Melody shook her head as she watched, slightly embarrassed by the sight and glad that no one was around to witness it. Then, noticing the direction the two were traveling, she gasped in shock and started running after them. For the castle that was evidently their destination was rumored to be haunted and deadly. Apparently those that went in rarely ever came back out.
Melody called on the rocks below the surface as she ran, preparing herself for any monsters that may have been lurking around the vicinity of the castle in wait for some tasty prey. Her powers over rocks and jewels had been useful in times when she’d been on little adventures like this.
Catching up to her sister at the entrance of the castle, Melody quickly let her powers slip as she stared in fear at the building. The towers seemed to loom above her and a flash of lightning added a strange and dreadful look to them. Vines and moss grew in between the cracks of the castle's stonewalls, while destroyed cannons and longbows littered the grounds. Both drew closer to each other unconsciously, their fear growing as a howl came from within the building.
The large double-doors in front of the two were slightly cracked open, the evident place of Poofles entrance. Though her love for the dog was great, Serenity stared at the doors with horror. Melody watched her sister closely, and even though she had a great fear of the castle herself, knew it was better to go inside than wait in the rain for the dog to make its way back. Going against all that she knew was right, she led the other inside the building.
The inside of the building had barely any light, the clouds and rain outside obscuring any rays that could have made their way inside from the sun. The wind from the outside ran through the building, creating all sorts of noises that played with the girls’ minds. A creak from somewhere in the castle led to Serenity grabbing her sister’s hand for comfort.
“Serenity, do you think you can use any of your powers of witchcraft to help out in here?” Melody asked her sister, guessing that the answer was probably ‘no’. Guessing right, Melody reached into her pocket and grabbed out an amethyst that she always kept with her. Whispering a few words, the jewel began to glow, giving the girls an adequate light to repel the darkness of the castle.
“We shouldn’t have come here…” Serenity muttered, close to tears as she looked around. The rumors of the place were screaming in her head. “We’re probably going to die.”
“We are not going to die. Perhaps we’ll be a little creeped out when we leave, but there won’t be any dying today. We’ve been on many adventures and we’ll just add this to the list.” Melody spoke with the courage of experience, remembering the times when they had fought monsters, saved the world from blowing up, and stopped an insane ruler from marrying their mother. Going into a haunted castle didn’t seem so bad after all of that.
Melody jumped as the doors slammed closed behind them. She bit her lip and fought back her own tears. Serenity was now sobbing deeply, repeating that she wanted to go home over and over. Melody just hugged her, knowing that they couldn’t make their way back now even if they wanted to.
“Come on, sis! Be brave! We’ll make it through the night. Now, let’s do what we came here to do: find Poofles. He’s probably scared out of his mind and this isn’t going to help him calm down… wherever he is.”
Serenity nodded, wiping away the tears in her eyes. “I’ll try to be brave, but no promises.”
Melody chuckled. “I’m fine with that.” She looked around as she tried to find a place to start their search. A door opposite them was slightly open, most likely meaning it was the place Poofles had run to. Pointing at it, she continued, “Let’s start there.”
She held tight to her sister’s hand, leading her forward slowly but surely. Halfway to the door, all of the candles in the room suddenly lit up. Both girls froze in fear, squeezing the other’s hand until they felt their blood circulation was going to stop. Muttering encouraging words to her sister and herself, Melody continued forward. She took a step and stopped. Nothing happened. Making sure it wasn’t a fluke, she tested it again. No strange occurrences happening after that, she walked forward and reached out her free hand to grab the door handle.
A bright flash suddenly lit the room, blinding the twins momentarily. When it had receded, bright and cheerful music filled the air. People’s voices could be heard in the room beyond, giving quite a scare to both girls. Looking at each other in surprise, their mouths dropped even further when they saw each other. Instead of being soaking wet and wearing comfortable clothes, the two were now dry and garbed in beautiful ball gowns.
“Oh, my gosh…” Serenity whispered, her eyes wide in awe. “What is going on?” She ran her finger down the skirt of her gown, the purple silk the softest thing she had ever touched.
More noises came from within the room beyond, making the girls look at each other. Then, the noise suddenly died down and the girls’ curiosity got the better of them. Slowly opening the door, they entered into the next room which happened to be a huge ballroom.
Serenity looked around with the same awe she had felt before, her eyes never stopping as she looked around the room. A small band played music on the left side of the room, giving rhythm to the people dancing around the room in elegant clothes. Tables of food stood to the right, the delicious aroma of the snacks making her salivate with eagerness. Her eyes ended their journey as they fell upon a gorgeous staircase opposite the door she had just entered. Seeming to be made of pure marble, Serenity knew that there was evident wealth living here. She looked over at her sister, who seemed to be in equal feeling.
Melody looked at her sister and their eyes met. She guessed what her sister was thinking at the moment and agreed with her. Still, though such a gorgeous scene played out before them, she couldn’t help but wonder at how this had come to be. Just a few short moments before the castle had been uninhabited, unhappy, and unloved. There was just no logical explanation for the people standing before her and the untouchable beauty of the building.
She looked around, wondering if they could be ghosts. Shaking her head, she threw the idea away when she realized that ghosts could not have changed so much of the room. Plus, her sister was now chomping away at food on the side, and her continuation meant that it was of no harm. Melody sighed and leaned against a nearby pillar, closing her eyes as she tried to think of what this was all for.
A sudden silence in the room made her curious and she opened her eyes to see a beautiful woman garbed in a magnificent cream gown walk down the staircase. The woman, evidently of high stature, gazed down upon the inhabitants of the room with bright, curious green eyes. Her brown hair, dressed in hundreds of tiny curls, gave an air of elegance to her that couldn’t be matched. The woman stopped at the bottom of the stairs, smiling as all of those in the room bowed or curtsied. Even the twins curtsied to show their respect, though they had no clue as to who the woman could be.
With a nod from the new arrival activity started back up in the room. The band began playing with a little more beat than before, wanting to put on the best of performance. Those who had been dancing did so now with a little more zeal than just a few moments ago. Several people standing off to the side began gossiping, talking about the woman with the greatest praise and respect. Melody strained to hear what they were saying and gasped when she heard the name.
Serenity, still at the food table, was oblivious to the conversation around her and was surprised when her sister called her over with a stern look on her face.
“I’ve been calling you for about a minute and all you did was stuff your face! Could you be a little more polite while we’re in this atmosphere?” Melody waited for her sister to nod and then let out a sigh as she prepared to tell her of what she had heard. “Ok. Don’t freak out, but… I don’t think we’re anywhere near home.”
Serenity stared at her sister in confusion. “What do you mean? It’s just beyond the fields.”
“Maybe there is a building there at the moment that looks like our home… but it just isn’t. Serenity, the lady that came in here…” She paused, still a little shocked by the news herself.
Serenity stared at her sister, the confusion on her face greater than before. “What are you talking about? Did the rain give you a fever or something?”
“She’s Queen Amylia!”
Serenity’s face paled as she understood what her sister meant. “B-but… She died long before the castle was even finished! How could that be?”
“I’m not sure…” Melody replied. “But we can’t get back home if we’re here, stuck in the past…”
Serenity let out a whimper as tears flooded her eyes. She reached up to wipe them away, her heart sinking as she realized the trouble they were in. Melody just stared at her sister, her hands clenched in anger. How could she have let this happen? She was the responsible one…
But somehow she knew that she wouldn’t have been able to stop it. Whatever the reason, the two had been sent through time for a reason. And she couldn’t help but think… Why, oh, why, me…
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