The 'novel' I'm writing is about a band called Addix. They are working on making their CD and what not. I wrote a series of songs as 'their songs' cause I'm a freak and when I wrote about them writing songs and what not I actually wanted there to be some legit songs.
I just want to know if they are any good.
I don't really consider myself to be much of a songwriter so any feedback/tips would be much appreciated!
This thread is for the ballads on their 'CD'. I'm going to post all of them on this first post. (I only do this because I don't want to make 12 different posts on this board.) The most upbeat and in-between songs will each be on different threads so look for them too!
The number indicates the order I wrote them in.
Some have been deleted because I no longer like them and are not part of my 'novel'
Thanks!
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#2. Your Backyard
We were the kids
That played with cars all night long
We played with sticks, rocks, and worms
We were always together
Never apart
As we got older we just followed our hearts
All the days that we spent
In your backyard
We didn’t care
It was always us against the world
Chorus:
Well I thought
We would be together
Forever
But I guess I was wrong
You told me
This would last
Forever
Where did we go wrong?
We had a good four years
But then things fell apart
I never meant to hurt you
I know you think it’s not true
But I just wish that we were back in your yard
Where did those carefree days go
We could do no wrong
Didn’t I mean more to you
Then what’ in some simple song?
And all those days that we spent
In your backyard
We never cared
It was always us against the world
Chorus
We never thought we’d ever have to say goodbye
We spent so many years together
Why’d you make me cry?
This can’t be the end
(Echo) I won’t let it be
Tell me it was a mistake
(Echo) Please make it be
I can’t bring myself to say goodbye
All the days that we spent
In your backyard
We didn’t care
It was always us against the world
Chorus
#10. My Heart
Did we just fight?
We never do
What is this new, anger?
You’ve never
Yelled at me, like that
I’ve never
Hated you, like that
What happened to, us
Chorus:
How could you?
You ruined him
He was my heart
Now he’s gone
You stole him
My precious, star
He was once
My whole heart
What did you do?
To make him act
Like that
He doesn’t drink
He’s my modest man
But you cast some kind of spell
And made him
Act like an ass-hole freak
Chorus
We never fight
But we did
Over you
Are you happy now?
That I don’t like who, he is
Does it make you smile?
When I’m in pain
Its working
Chorus
You broke his heart
You said good-bye
No good reason
You changed your mind
Do you know?
What you’ve done to him
Do you care?
That you ruined him
Oh…
Chorus x2
He was my heart
My precious, star
You stole him
My whole heart
#12. You're mine
-Banjo-
-Acoustic guitar-
This is my humble plea
This is my long lost dream
My wish goes out to you
This is it, baby
My eyes are blind
When you’re not near
My heart cries out
To you my dear
I can’t imagine
Anyone else making
Me feel the way I do
I give my love to you
-Banjo-
Listen close now honey
It’s getting harder now to speak
My voice is growing softer
Come here closer, my sweet lover
Thank you for eternity
For being patient
And listening
Even when I tried your patience
And made you think
I didn’t love you
I always did
I never stopped
My love, I did it all for you
-Acoustic guitar-
My heart goes out to you
I give my love to you
-Banjo-
This is the moment, lover
This is our chance
Our final stand
Tear down these walls
We’ve built up
And take my hand
I know it won’t be simple
I know it takes a lot of time
But I don’t care, sweet lover
I just want to hear you say
“You’re mine”
Oh…
-Banjo-
Listen closer
Come in closer
-Electric guitar and bass-
I give my love to you….
My heart beats faster, baby
And suddenly I don’t want to die….
You’re my angel
It’s no lie
Come here closer
You’re mine…
You’re mine…
This is my humble plea
This is my long lost dream
My wish goes out to you
This is it, baby
