i just submitted part III as well @Lucrezia, i hate to inundate you with requests but it's all part of the same story and it'd be nice if you could review it in its totality. this is the last part:
Dude! I have a novel up, and it's quite a few chapters long, so it's totally up to you if you want to read the whole thing, read and review all the parts, or just skip right to the very end (it'll make a lot more sense if you at least read the whole thing, but like I said, there's quite a bit up there, so no pressure to do so )
Hey, Lucrezia, not sure how comfortable you are with romance stuff but I'd love it if you could take a look at Holly, The List, and the End of the World: Chapter 1. I'm not looking for much in the way of grammatical errors because I'm sure there's loads but character criticism and plot stuff is desperately needed. The other two chapters are up too if you feel like being especially ambitious. Thanks