I'm preparing my thread super early this year and starting to think about themes and structures! Maybe I'll have a clearer idea of what I'm doing by the end of the month, but I'm sure there will be lots of experimenting and poe-tree gaming!
The pebble was my first - ordinary in its early yearning. I washed it in the wash and watched it turn hostile in the fading aubergine.
When I was five a feather fathomed from the sky like thunder; at six a stolen soldier from my brother's underwear drawer
and then at thirty, there was you. One shoe black, the other blathered from too much talking and you were my cul-de-sac with no road through.
I meant to save your cuff links in my safety deposit box with the pebble and the soldier, but somehow I left them in the rain to rust.
If you didn't get it, the message is I'm rusty There's too much playing with words, but there are a few lines or patches of imagery I might be able to rescue and that was better than I expected.
One shoe black, the other blathered from too much talking and you were my cul-de-sac with no road through.
This is perfect. This is an awesome and true suburban image the way I read it. It's of people stepping outside their doors to speak to neighbors, and the geography of a neighborhood. It reminds me of making maps of my block and the blocks around my block when I was a kid.
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The day my father died I got a rabbit. Floppy eared. Sad eyed. He didn't eat for a week and then he died.
We hid the rabbit's hurt in the back garden (wooden box; dig dirt) but over night the bodies crossed like fretwork.
I went to visit daddy in the morning. Daisies laid. Ash tree. The spirit of my father came and talked to me.
He said the rabbit died because of nature. Baby clothes. Blank lives. Big words I couldn't transpose though I've tried.
We see my rabbit dad at the graveyard (pebble strewn; small sad) but only the garden grave makes me feel bad.
A/N: I asked my sister and her boyfriend for themes. He gave me misery and she gave me happiness. So I glared until she laughed and turned it into bunny rabbits. "Do you think we're opposites?" she asked. Not in my poetry...
The lines are trying too hard to be formatted and my tutor would tell me to stop playing it safe and to throw the box away. I'd ask him 'What box?' and he'd say 'Now you're thinking.' Of course, my other tutor would say 'Bravo, now write it again as a sonnet'.
This one's for that second tutor who always did love my dactyls. It's a double dactyl for anyone interested.
#3 Hickety Pickety
Hickety pickety girl with a ticket, she's off to the theme-park to leap on a ride.
Queues are so finicky invisibility wished for by people still held up in line.
A/N: Luke said I had to write on theme parks and mining, but the mining got dropped somewhere along the way. I like it. Inspired by a section of Neil Gaiman's 'Stardust': Spoiler
Neil Gaiman
3. Hankety pankety Boy in a blanket, he's Off on a goose-chase to Look for a star
Incontrovertibly Journeys through Faerie Strip off the blanket to See who you are.
#4 The Value of Values
We had a head teacher called Andrews who tried to teach all of us values but his words went to waste with a sour after taste as we smoked up the Valium by handfuls.
A/N: Luke said I had to write on Valium and I misheard him and thought he said values. This was the result and it quickly decided to pretend to be a limerick, but the form is off.
My sister travels to forget the frailty of autumn snow; distance is for the discontent who passing by will pause to know
the frailty of autumn snow but never stop to hear its words. Who passing by will pause to know the dialect of autumn birds
but never stop to hear its words. Distance is for the discontent the dialect of autumn birds my sister travels to forget.
A/N: I tried to write this poem yesterday but it refused to be written. I did a little better today. Failed attempts in the spoiler in case they're of interest.
Spoiler
1. Distance is the disadvantage of Dystopia
2. My sister travels to forget the frailty of autumn snow; distance is for the discontent.
The brush of history has rent a shadow on the roads we know. My sister travels to forget
This one's for Audy, no points for guessing why <3
#7 Playing Games
No sense and nonsense in a world with an heir not destined to rule, suckled on the bough of ancestry. and there's no air and no ruler so our lines are all curved and everyone knows that the noes have the answer.
and how do you console the console owner who spent his fifty cents on a faulty device but it breaks and he's broke and he's looking for a bit of free advice.
and how much is a byte of the apple? Do we err on caution's site? or sell him fifty shades of a paperback and tell him to recite his rights.
and what about the girl on her cell who's concerned about her cellulite, do we bow to the ayes of our society or open up our eyes and use our sight.
A/N: Nonsense? Yes. Fun to write? Certainly. I've had a stressful day at work so I made myself a list of homophones and played with them. Maybe it will be fun to tidy up, or maybe I'll shake my head and groan.
I can feel it some days as an ache in my right, shackled to my carpals like Delilah.
A/N: I started writing this, but that sense of despair passed too quickly so I'll have to pick it up again when I'm in the right frame of mind. It's hard to write a poem about not writing.
#9 Don't Feed the Penguin
I think of you curled o- -ver the laptop, sleeping but unable to close yourself against the backdrop of city lights
where castles cluster and fold in concertina flight
and you linger on marshmallow clouds as the dragon slumbers and the sword of an off duty knight-
but the signal rumbles and I promised not to feed the penguin to-
She used to read a book, about the last supper and the holy grail, but my bible was written from the road like her charcoal smile - she’s put her fist through too many paintings
and a new page turns in the shatter of glass and her heart is cheap, the glass pages burned black by holy days and I pray the planes will Passover us - fly overhead hiding the stars
but her lipstick redraws me in the charcoal, the stains of Da Vinci on my shirt and I read the road and cross my bible, our frozen faces lie bro ken at the foot of the stairs [a painting that was]
for broken hearts make exquisite paintings
A/N: With many thanks to Meshugenah, niteowl and SparkOfDoubt for allowing me to steal their words >> a result of the Poetree game.
We approach Earley at sixteen past the hour we were supposed to arrive but I read my book and let the irony depart like the constellation of trees beyond the railway track and the snow falling like shredded paper.
A stranger holds a conversation with his phone, his silences broadening into the evening as a suited gentleman scribbles frantically in a black notepad.
Then Earley is behind us and the trees give way to streets and buildings, the echo of boots blustering down Montague street and the close of Dickens as the train slows and this is Reading.
A/N: A lot of work still needed. If you're wondering, my route home on a lazy day is through Earley, into Reading, take the bus to Montague street and walk past Dickens Close. This is yesterday's poem; nothing so far today. I'm starting to struggle.