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[quote=griffinkeeper]The same rocks that struck the ship were the same ones that supported Marlon now. The fog had finally cleared and Marlon examined his predicament. He was several hundred yards off shore. He had been below deck when the rocks had torn the ship apart, but he had managed to grab his weapons and possessions. He examined them now with little enthusiasm. He had a knife, a bow, a quiver without arrows, a short sword, one hundred feet of rope, and a grappling hook.
Marlon removed his armor and stripped off his pants and shirt. He tied knots in the legs of his pants, and used his belt to tighten the waist end. With the shirt, he tied knots on the arms and neck. Marlon smiled as he remembered the time when the assassins had taken him to that cold lake and taught him how to turn his clothes into flotation devices. It was paying off.
His armor, grappling hook, short sword, bow, and quiver went into the ocean. The knife and the rope he kept, they would be essential to survival when he made it to shore. With the knife, he could make everything that he needed and with the rope, he could make shelter and climb.
He got into the water and the cold shocked him momentarily. He put the rope around his body, filled the shirt and pant floats with air, secured his knife, and began swimming to shore.
The journey took ten minutes of intense swimming and at the end of it Marlon found himself on shore, gasping for air and shivering from cold. Rocks lined the shore and Marlon regretted kicking his shoes off in the water. He moved away from the surf and warmed himself on the rocks. He untied his clothes and laid them out to dry, as well as the rope. Climbing with wet rope was not wise and it seemed to Marlon that he would have plenty of time to figure out his next move. He looked over and fifty feet away was a body.[/quote]
Marlon removed his armor and stripped off his pants and shirt. He tied knots in the legs of his pants, and used his belt to tighten the waist end. With the shirt, he tied knots on the arms and neck. Marlon smiled as he remembered the time when the assassins had taken him to that cold lake and taught him how to turn his clothes into flotation devices. It was paying off.
His armor, grappling hook, short sword, bow, and quiver went into the ocean. The knife and the rope he kept, they would be essential to survival when he made it to shore. With the knife, he could make everything that he needed and with the rope, he could make shelter and climb.
He got into the water and the cold shocked him momentarily. He put the rope around his body, filled the shirt and pant floats with air, secured his knife, and began swimming to shore.
The journey took ten minutes of intense swimming and at the end of it Marlon found himself on shore, gasping for air and shivering from cold. Rocks lined the shore and Marlon regretted kicking his shoes off in the water. He moved away from the surf and warmed himself on the rocks. He untied his clothes and laid them out to dry, as well as the rope. Climbing with wet rope was not wise and it seemed to Marlon that he would have plenty of time to figure out his next move. He looked over and fifty feet away was a body.[/quote]
@Griffinkeeper: I tried to message you, but you were apparently offline, so I thought I'd bring it up here in the discussion topic. There are a few things I find odd about your post. One is that he was dressed in his armour on a ship that was travelling several weeks across the sea... Sailors generally dress lightly, as if they're washed overboard, they need to be able to float. The wearing of armour is a large flaw in my opinion, as a man dressed in armour probably would have drowned due to the weight, when the ship sunk.
Another questionable point is how your character threw his equipment into the sea when he woke up when he could have just placed them on the rock and retrieved them when he felt up to it after resting - you did mention that it was a good 10 minute swim, but this is certainly achievable when someone is well rested.
Additionally 100 feet of rope is 33 metres. That's a ludicrous amount of rope.
Finally, Firestarter mentioned that the crash happened without warning, so I'm not sure if your character actually would have had time to gather his possessions before the ship sunk.
If I'm wrong at all, please do say so! I haven't participated in a story book before =]
