I've noticed this is very character driven. I'm not saying that's bad thing at all. It is what works for you. There is a plot deep down there somewhere and I am determined to find it. It's what drives me, as a reader, to go on. The characters want to me to go on, to find out what happens to them next and what purpose it all serves.
I liked the change up of Chris actually having something good happen to him. Not everything should be utterly tragic. But alas, he is ripped of even that.
I found Donny's behavior somewhat odd in this chapter, especially at the end. I'm sure you purposely did this. But I better see a reason later on, or you'll lose plausibility. I'm sure you have everything in order though.
Cheat your landlord if you can and must, but do not try to shortchange the Muse. It cannot be done. You can’t fake quality any more than you can fake a good meal. — William S. Burroughs
