My mother

Once upon a time when i was a wee little child
In the middle of the night i had a horrible fright
Mother!Mother! i cried and she was at once upon me
caressing me,soothing me,comforting me,holding me
After a while she me let go and set me to sleep again
but mother mother ! I cried what if i feel scared again ?
she smiled and wrapped me close and told me
Oh my darling whatever shall you do without me ?
Thus I replied perhaps i shall do nothing,
can you not stay beside me always ?
Oh no my darling, i will have to leave sometime
and in her arms I cried ,when come that time ?
I know not my darling,whenever Lord decides
But I can always stay with you too If you decide ?
Oh joy,tell me how does that come to become ?
For I wish you to forever and always hold me tight
She smiled & said well then,close you eyes real tight
And look deep inside your heart,you will always find me
If you will remember me always,you can always find me
and she whispered softly in my ear,
Good night my darling ,sleep tight dont let the bed bugs bite
let not the monsters in your dreams, give you a fright,
And if you do ever need me you know where to find me
For i will forever, lie in your heart,whenever you call me
I slept like never before that night came upon me no fright
to find in the morning that me mother had passed out that night
I was sad but indeed i knew i had my mother always beside me
always had i remember that my mother was deep inside me
Until the day i lay myself on my death bed
after years and years I was once again fright
oh mother, I am afraid of this sleep,whatever shall happen next?
and she softly whispered in my ear,erasing all my fear
Good night my darling, sleep tight let not the bed bugs bite
let not the monsters in your dreams, give you a fright,
And if you do ever need me you know where to find me
For i will forever, lie in your heart,whenever you call me
And i went peacefully into a sleep never to wake up again
-------Zaid Ansari

Nicely done! You grammar isn't fab but the words truely speak for themself. I love how it's about your Mum too! It's a warm, comforting subject. 8/10

Hi there, Zaid Ansari. You have a beautiful name<33

Okay, but about the writing, I like the concept of the poem, very sweet. What you need to do now is make it look professional by improving the grammar. Remember all I's should be uppercase when you use them as a pronoun. And well, all sentences should start with uppercase too, no matter if it's in a poem. Remember to insert commas and periods into your poem when you re-read. Also, I'd recommend you to create stanzas. Why is this? Because if you do, the reader will not feel lazy about it, and there are more possibilities that he/she finishes reading it. But I think you did a pretty good job!

Keep it up!

~Solly<3

As others have said, some grammar errors and some breaks in the flow to watch out for. But it is a sweet poem with a nice concept. Since this is a poem with longer lines, I would put it in verses to make it easier on the reader's eyes. It'w harder to read all together like that and verses would look a little more professional. Also, proof read your work. There are grammar errors, not too major, though, but I would read through it a couple more times to catch those small mistakes.

But otherwise, a very nice poem.
Keep writing and don't give up!
-Greena

this was lovely. it really tells how a mother loves your child enough to wake up in the middle of the night and comfort them even if it takes a while. my mother always did that and brought me somethign nice to drink its comforting and wonderful. i dont know what il do once my mother is gone. again this was nice and good i enjoyed every word of it