Cycling

Cycling

I laugh at your jokes,
I jest with your words,
I smile at your looks,
I continue living each and every day.

I hurt inside. Laugh.
I don’t want to tell you. Jest.
I feel insecure. Smile.
I’m upset. Continue.

I cry. Laugh.
I long to tell you. Jest.
I scream inside. Smile.
I’m sad. Continue.

Laugh. Jest. Smile. Continue
I don’t know what to do.
Laugh. Jest. Smile. Continue.
I don’t know what to say.

Laugh. Jest. Smile. Continue.



You are my ocean of emptiness.

lovely! this IS a sad poem I love how you took the words from the first stanza and continued them throughout the poem! one nit-picky thing I have to say is that when you say this,

I scream inside. Smile.
I’m sad. Continue.

I would change the "sad" to a better word. "I'm aching, I'm falling...etc" I feel these words would better evoke the tone with which the rest of the poem follows.

good job!

This poem was good. But if you ask me, it made no sense, probably because you didnt have a story line or plot. What are you talking about? Is this "jest" because of a person. Who? What? Where? Why? Who made you feel this way, is it even because of a person? Who is the person your laughing at? Where is this taking place? School home? Why? Why? Why? Why?