Old Road of Regret

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So I wanted to make this longer and explain it a little bit but a friend of mine read it and said she could relate to this with a different reason than mine...so I decided to leave this the way it is...yup and that was all I had to say XD

The same turns,
The same claw piercing my heart.
It makes me realize I've been here before.

The same restless feeling,
The same biting cuts.
I don't want to go down this road anymore.

The same hopeless tears,
The same confusing fears.
I'm chained once again to my own misery.

The same selfhating thoughts,
The same dead end.
All this brings is selfdestruction.

I should have never came here.

i like this poem but i can see why you and your friend took it different ways. It could relate to a person who has returned to a physical place where they were once hurt but it could also about someone who has harmed themselves in some way or another. In both cases it takes with knowledge as though you have been through it. I think that is good, it gives you a wider audience and also you feel as though you can relate to it. I think it is also rather brave to talk about such a hard subject. I agree with your friend, i wouldn't extend it because it gets the message across in a few lines which is great.

The same claw piercing my heart.

i think this line shows the two different interpretations but all together impressive poem. I find it very admirable.

Quite impressive, qara! There is a lot of feeling in this piece... and I can feel it! The realization of getting the same repetitive unpleasant feelings again is very hard indeed.

There is very good usage of words here and a lot of emphasis has been laid on the persona's emotion. The poem isn't too long or tedious and engages the reader and leaves an impact on the mind as well. Nice job and well done. Keep the ink flowing!

XD

I like the fact of how it rhymed, is showed a graceful distribution of deep words showing emotion.