I am the Unknown Soldier

Some call me M.I.A
Some say I can't go home again
Some say I chose to stay
I am the unknown soldier
Who you refuse to know
A brother and a friend of yours
Who left so long ago

Some call me P.O.W
The one they left behind
I am the unknown soldier
The one they never tried to find
I'm the one they never tried to find

I'm a farmer from Missouri
The soldier from St. Paul
I was the hero of my family
And still my pictures upon their wall
I'm a poet and a scholar
And the boy who lived next door
I am the unknown soldier
Forgotten on a foreign shore
Long forgotten on a foreign shore

I was someone's lovin' daddy
I was someone's pride and joy
I was someone's tender lover
A worried Mama's little boy
And if you should just forget me here
Then I should forget you too
Please won't you try to bring me home
For I'm someone who belongs to you
I'm still someone who belongs to you

I am the unknown soldier
With no more tears to shed
I'm just a fading memory
A part of the living dead
My country had betrayed me
Yet I have forgiven you
And every night I pray to God
That somehow he'll forgive you too
Yes even somehow he'll forgive you too

I am the unknown soldier
The one for whom you cried
That familiar face that you can't face
The one your country told you died
I am the unknown soldier
With dreams you'll rescue me
And I am a man who understands
Only death might ever set me free
Only death might ever set me free

I am the unknown soldier
And I'm black and blue and grey
I said I am the unknown soldier
And I die slowly every day
I am the unknown soldier
The one you bought and sold
I'm the one you bought and sold

So lay down close beside me and bow
And gently stroke my face
And wrap your arms around me now
Before we leave this place
Some call me P.O.W.
Some call me M.I.A.
Some say I can't come home again
But will return someday

Hello there!!

I genuinely like this piece. It is perfectly at home in the lyrical poetry category as it has an air of repetition. I love the subject of this piece as well.

So lay down close beside me and bow
And gently stroke my face
And wrap your arms around me now
Before we leave this place
Some call me P.O.W.
Some call me M.I.A.
Some say I can't come home again
But will return someday

This was probably my favorite part of the poem. I feel that it was a wonderful way to wrap the poem up while also adding an essence of hope.

If there were one thing about this poem that I'm not in love with, it would have to be the length of the poem. I feel like it's just a tad too long. I feel like the next-to-last stanza wasn't needed and that the poem would've been perfect without it. I don't feel that it enhanced the poem at all. That's pretty much my only suggestion.

All in all, incredible work!! Keep writing!!! I look forward to reading more from you!!

Wow, I really liked this. It was a very powerful piece and you could see the emotion there clearly. I thought this was great. I like the way you end each stanza by saying something, then repeating it to emphasize it.

I was someone's lovin' daddy
I was someone's pride and joy
I was someone's tender lover [I like the way you add a little repetition here, but not enough to make it dull]
A worried Mama's little boy
And if you should just forget me here [I don't really think the 'And' at the beginning of this line is really necessary. I think it would be better off without it there.]
Then I should forget you too [This line seems to break the flow of the poem just a little, but not that bad]
Please won't you try to bring me home
For I'm someone who belongs to you
I'm still someone who belongs to you

I am the unknown soldier
With no more tears to shed
I'm just a fading memory
A part of the living dead
My country had betrayed me [Do you think this should be 'My country has betrayed me'?
Yet I have forgiven you [This line seems to break the flow, too, but again, nothing serious]
And every night I pray to God
That somehow he'll forgive you too
Yes even somehow he'll forgive you too

I am the unknown soldier
And [I don't think you should add the 'and' here] I'm black and blue and grey
I said I am the unknown soldier
And I die slowly every day
I am the unknown soldier
The one you bought and sold
I'm the one you bought and sold

Some say I can't come home again
But will return someday

I really like these lines, and it's a great way to end your poem, too I think it might sound a little better if you put and 'I' there, like ; 'But I will return someday'
Anyway, just my opinion, so don't feel like you need to listen to any of it XD
You really did do a great job on this, though! I thought it was really great.
~Tayla