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Chapter SIX: The KISS
LOCATION: the Bridge

I only suddenly realised how scared and shaky I was as I walked towards the Bridge. Everyone as usual turned smiling but there was a grimace missing. Tyrone wasn’t there.
“Hey what’s up?” Jared asked sounding slightly worried.
“Don’t call me crazy Jared but I think I just saw a wolf”
“What?” He sounded almost panicked, I turned to the rest of the group they looked exactly like Jared did... crud they think I’m crazy.
“I swear to god Jared I’m not lying, I saw a wolf and it... it was so big” Jared looking horrified sneered one word.
“Tyrone!” He shouted, it so loud that it echoed, vibrating against the walls of the bridge. I turned quickly and saw Tyrone walking up, he was topless, his stomach muscles clearly defined as he strode over, his eyes bore into mine completely; ignoring everything that Jared had said. He came to me took me by the shoulders and kissed me. In front of everyone and hell... I didn’t care, I wasn’t going as red as my hair, that’s always a plus. I could feel all my anger from earlier melting away into his arms as my body followed suit. It wasn’t like the gentle kiss near where we found Nario. It was harsh and panicked. As his lips pressed against mine I could feel his body so close. All I wanted to do was collapse into an Inferno with him; I didn’t care what anyone would say... he was mine and was never going away, not if I could help it. He pulled away suddenly, clasping my face into his hands he whispered;
“Are you okay?” All I could do was mutter an ‘a hum’ “Breathe out” He said, smiling ruggedly. I stared into his black eyes. Right... I had actually forgotten to breathe. I took a wispy breath out and he gave a dark chuckle and stepped away. I felt suddenly naked without him, well, on me. Or does that sound wrong? After all we did only kiss...
“My god so it’s true!” Brandon said laughing.
“Why wouldn’t it be?” Tyrone snarled. Sasha signed and merely stood up.
“Because Jared told you not, may I add twice, and you did anyway... you know what that means Tyrone. You’re responsible for yourself now. We’re sick of cleaning up all your-”
“That’s enough Sasha” Jared said bluntly. I was trying to process the information but I didn’t understand. What did Sasha mean ‘you’re responsible for yourself now’? “You know actually what I said when we first met her, you crossed a line this morning and I warned you and still you deliberately crossed it again. You know what happens when this gets on the record... the council already consider us to be problematic”
“Screw the fucking council” Tyrone said enraged. Everyone suddenly stopped and stared looking horrified at what Tyrone had said.
“What council? What are you two talking about?” They all looked at me.
“We’ve said too much already” Davion said looking at me with sad eyes. “Go home Lily” I stood rooted to the spot; they had never asked me to leave.
“I...I... can’t my mum she-”
“Go” It was Tyrone “You’ve done enough already” It was almost a whisper but it might as well as been a shout. I had been hissed at, shouted at, hit at but never had these eight... seven now... they had never said anything to hurt or upset me. Anger. All that anger from before boiled to the surface. No more. I was going to leave them behind this time... they were not going to win.
“Fine... whatever do what you want” I lifted my bag from the floor and with my head held high. I passed Jared. “If you want me I’ll be fifty miles from wherever you are” He looked shocked and his face twisted... good. I turned to Tyrone “I’d insult you too but you’d be too dumb to notice” I flipped my hair back and deliberately fought back tears as I walked down the barely lit street. The smell of alcohol ran through the air, I was in for a rough night...

*** Tyrone ***

Tyrone was nothing but cold inside until he had saw Lily for the first time. He had been the one that found her under the Bridge. Jared liked to act like the hero but he had been the one to tell them all to give her a chance. Jared had warned them all that a relationship was a bad idea.
“She’s just a kid, a badly hurt kid at that, we all need to be careful” Tyrone had been warned and after an Alpha had warned that was it... there was no going back. Tyrone still couldn’t believe how he had managed to be so cruel to her for the last year but he had managed to somehow and he had stalked off. Nothing unusual about that, but the fact that she had followed him, Tyrone could only barely believe that she had actually followed him and finally he was alone for her for the first time and when they had kissed... wow. It seemed like all her fiery hair had melted all the ice in his heart. When he made a pathetic excuse to get her alone again he had hurt her, again. God what was wrong with him? Why couldn’t he just like someone? Why did he have to destroy everything good that literally stumbled into his life? That would be the last time he would hurt her. How wrong he was. He walked to her council flat in another pathetic attempt to apologise but when he saw that boy... touch her against her will... it still gave him a sick feeling in his stomach to think about it. He had turned, he couldn’t help it and when he had seen her save that little boy’s life he knew he loved her. He admitted it to himself there and then. It made him want to kill the boy more than ever. He didn’t though; he just seriously injured him and was quite certain he wouldn’t die from his injuries. He could only dream. When he had run back to camp and he couldn’t help it, in front of the Alpha. He had deceived him openly. Then he had said it was Lily’s fault. Lily this time wasn’t taking it. He had seen it deep in her eyes. She this time hurt him, and it felt good. Sick.
“You didn’t have to say that” Jared said looking at him with careful eyes.
“I can say whatever I want now” He snarled looking at Jared with cold eyes.
“I am not kicking you out just yet” Jared said giving him a look through slanted eyes. “You will lose you’re post, Sasha will become second in command” He heard Sasha and Davion whoop and high-five each other. Tyrone didn’t care if he had lost his post, they would still listen to him, after Jared he had the most experience and he knew that Jared knew that.
“And...” Tyrone said through a growl. Jared looked at him and gave a little twisted smile.
“You’re never allowed to see Lily again” Tyrone didn’t have to say anything at all.
“What!” Leon shouted.
“You can’t do that...Think about Lily” Pierce said back.
“I am” Jared answered still looking at Tyrone.
“What?” Tyrone growled at Jared, who wasn’t letting him from his eye sight.
“You're not going to say anything?”
“Listen we have more on our minds to worry about then Tyrone’s love life” Brendan said.
“Or lack of” Sasha shouted. Brendan completely ignored him.
“Like what?” Pierce said stepping forward cocking his head.
“Nario” It was a simple world that stopped all fidgeting and talking. Everyone’s head bowed in remembrance. Little did any the boys know that Tyrone cried, actually cried, for his best friend. He couldn’t get the image out of his head.
“What about Nario?” Tyrone snapped.
“You found Nario’s shredded clothes, which is a sign of turning... right?” Tyrone nodded in response.
“Oh yes” Brendon said thinking “You said you found him naked, am I correct?” he asked. Tyrone nodded again. “What person do you know would attack a person on the street, see him turn into a warewolf and carry on fighting and get this... win?” The silence was unbearable.
“What are you saying?” Pierce asked.
“Isn’t it obvious... someone knew he wasn’t human”
“Or something” Tyrone snarled...he knew exactly what it was.
“Vampires” Sasha growled under his breath.
“Vampires aren’t allowed in the Europe anymore... you know what happened in the early seventeen hundreds they were caught! The ware council will not let them-”
“For crying out loud Jared what else could have done it?” Sasha asked.
“Fairies”
“First of all... Fairies are you kidding! They have no sense of direction. That’s why when they come to England they all end up in the Isle of Man. They think that’s England, despite whatever anyone else says”.
“Fine... Goblins”
“Could fight them in a heartbeat, they’re so stupid” Sasha replied
“What about Ghouls?”
“They are harder to kill but with a sharp blow to the head they topple right over, plus... what would a Ghoul be doing outside a graveyard?” Davion asked.
“I don’t know... hungry” Jared answered, he was beginning to lose his cool.
“So what do we have to work with?” Tyrone asked, keeping his hands in his pockets and avoiding people’s eyes.
“Vampires or Ghouls” Sasha replied.
“Vampires are not in Europe anymore... Listen I will go to Edinburgh tomorrow and see if I can get this sorted out with a Council representative until then, go to sleep!” He turned his face towards Tyrone and nodded at the floor. No sleeping bag for him... He tried to feel resentment towards Jared but he couldn’t. Not towards an Alpha. He signed as he buckled his legs and slipped to the floor. He heard Sasha arguing over what he is allowed to do know that he is Second in Command. He turned his head away grumpily and slouched, sagging his back and slipping into his deepest thoughts that were right now... panicking. ‘What am I going to do? Never seeing Lily again! I would rather die than go through that... never seeing her again... I can’t dishonour the Alpha again... what am I going to do?’ He stared into the gloomy night his head aching already. Imagine what Lily would be going through... Urg, it was stupid. Why did he have to send her away with nowhere to go? He smelt the Alcohol that ran through the air... He was in for a rough night.
Last edited by EvensLily on Wed Sep 28, 2011 3:57 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!! the imagination behind it is truly brilliant! however, there are a couple of things you need to fix up:

“I felt suddenly naked without him well, on me.” Should have another comma before well.

“The smell of Alcohol ran through the air” the word alcohol should be lower-case.

“He had been the one that found her on under the Bridge.” Did he find her ON the bridge or UNDER?

““You said you found him naked am I correct?” he asked.” There should be a comma before “ am I correct”

“See him turn into a warewolf and” isn’t it supposed to be werewolf, unless you have spelt it this way throughout the story, which is okay.

““For crying out loud Jared what else could have done it?” Sasha asked.
“Fairy’s”” It is spelt Fairies.

““Vampires are not in Europe anymore... Listen I will go to Edinburgh tomorrow and see if I can get this sorted out with a Council representative until then go to sleep!”” there should be a comma before “ got to sleep”

“He signed as He buckled his legs and slipped to the floor” lower-case “h” with second he.

overall, i love this story generally because i love werewolves!

there wasn't any major mistakes, but in my opinion, imagination is more important with a story than spelling a grammar.
i will be reading the start now that i am hooked. thank you for the wonderful read.

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