After-School Sport

After-School Sport

I pick up that orange ball in my hands
It's rough skin feels like alligator hide
I drop it with a push
And I let it bounce off the floor
It returns to my hands
I can feel the vibrations of it
Tingling my palms
From its reverbration off the gym floors

This wasn't too terribly remarkable to me. It seemed too typical, too "I'm a teenager in high school"-feeling to me.

"I pick up that orange ball in my hands"
"That" orange ball? Which one? This is too vague.

"I can feel the vibrations of it "
Try "I can feel its vibrations. "of it" always sounds bad to me.

Well. Hi. I like it.

The fact that you mentioned the "vibrations" you feel through the ball sort of demonstrates the energy of the poem, I think.

Also, good description:

It's rough skin feels like alligator hide.

-Dream Deep

Yeah, I'm not too sure I liked it. It seemed too plain to me. If you really want to write a poem about sports, be more descriptive. You need to add to this. As ZanyPlebeian said, it had that "I'm a high-schooler" feeling, instead of a more mature feeling. Work on it.

-*-*--Diana--*-*-

It doesn't sound finished to me. It just seemed to cut short, when there was so much more you could have said to make it better. I've nothing against short poems, but this one didn't really seem to have a purpose.